Read one of my newest poems? (I'll give 2 comments)

It's a little different from all of my others, so I'd like some feedback please. It's called Sin-Shine. I'll comment on two of yours if you give feedback on this one.

Sunshine turns to sin
Sinshine falls upon my head
I am graced with the beauty of pain
As once again I must face this dread

Clouds turn to darkness
Mounds sit over me
Their contents spill before my soul
As I try to be free

Trees turn to sadness
Dreams once more shade you
A single leaf comes crashing down
Reconciles the pictures you once drew

Breezes turn too hollow
Freezing days are to come
I try to end this cruel world
But my pain is not yet done

Rain turns to emptyness
Pain flies in my hair
Multicolored rainbows
Cascade with great despair

Days fade to winters
Dazes are of my mind
You'll always be my understanding
Nature calls it's time

absolutely fantastic! i'm gonna leave a comment & a vote for you. read any of mine you like! thanks! -beav

Thanks! I'll check out yours.

I'll check it out
Could you please do?
-I'M Ready
-Perfect Bliss
And could you please leave them a vote?

Done! Great poem hun!!

Fit Into This Mold
Sanctuary

Thanks!
Much Love,
.:Danielle:.