Honest Feedback (1 for 2)

Hey everyone,
i wrote a poem called;
- A Cliche Subject?

I'd love honest feedback on it.
No one liners, they really dont help me improve at all..
Ill get to your poems ASAP.
If you want any pacific one's doing then leave titles.
No explicit ones please...

Thanks in advanced!

Done yours! :)
Really enjoyable.
Thanks for the comment!
xx

Anyone else?

sure...ill read =D

~ Acia ~

DOne oyurs!
Excellent!
Thank you for the comment.
xx

Elemental Versifier* [Omar Bach

Done your as well.
Lol, ive now read all the poems youve wrote tahts been submitted on P & Q.
Thank you for your comment!
xx

Anyone else?

No one else?? :(

Come on guys i want more feedback on thios poem...
Pleasee????