Shakespearean Type Love Poem (Beget this Love)

Depending on the truthfulness of your comment, i will return the favor.

Beget this Love

http://www.best-love-poems.com/poems.php?id=773319

The exact person i was trying to attract!

"like summers sun" does the summer possess the sun if so was the ' meant to be omitted. In the second stanza (like I said I might be wrong) it goes "it took a dream to make this true
it takes a heart; thy love whilst do". I think something is wrong with the tenses in this section. The last thing I noticed was you say a "thouroughgoing love" is there supposed to be a space between thourough and going?

1) Yes, it was meant to be omitted.

2) Not wrong. Past tense for the beginning, and to make the love prosper at the current moment blah blah blah...

3)thouroughgoing = look it up, I believe it is correct. If not, my err.

I checked out your poem, "New" And i really enjoyed it although i cannot comment on it. It was well written and the flow was flawless. You are not a horrible writer. Don't be so hard on yourself.

Great job.
5/5

that particular poem had a great flow. And thank you... and my err on the mispelling.