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What do you guys think of my free verse, I used to rhyme when I was like 11, but now I'm 16 and working with the real stuff. I was taught by David Surette from Massachusetts and he's great. Anyone know him? And post any comments you have to say about my stuff.

P.S. Be brutal, I love harsh criticism. I see alot of 4+'s that are terrible around here.

Oh right, I might write some stuff about yours and all that jazz.

Bump cause people think I'm alright.