New poem needs fresh eyes

"A lonely disease"

First off, I think it's bs my love poem has to be categorized as 'explicit' because of one word.

Second, I'm struggling with the last line (some other spots as well), but the end in particular. I've decided to put the other variation that I'm considering a few lines after the end of the poem. But any other thoughts are welcome.

Please help out with thoughtful comments and your different perspectives - I would like feedback on the entire poem... I'm having trouble coming to terms with it as it's written... dunno, I can't figure it out

If you would like me to critique a poem, leave a title. I warn you, I don't hold back. Also, give me some time to do the reviews, I'm coming up on my finals. thx

(r/r/c or I'll ignore your requests)

Alright.
I'm pretty ruthless as well.
I hope you don't take it personally :].
But will you do my
More than Useless
and
Babble

Ok done, great poem:)
Could you please r/r/c

Like A Thunderstorm
and or
The Wait
and
Mountains
or any others that you want to.
Thanks bunches:)

I did your poem , and it was wonderful. I left comments for you. I am up for some harsh comments, at least I know that they wil be honest anyway could u plz do Crumple up and die thanks

Responded to all three of yours:
Babble, Mountains, Crumple up and Die.
BTW, the kind of comments I give I also hope to receive. I understand that many of you don't have quite the same grasp on things as others, no one is equal, but it would be nice for comments to be fleshed out more. Even if it's just 'I like it' - describe WHY you like it.

I'll step off my soap box now.

Also, if you guys really want a good grasp on my new poem. Read my previous ones: my latest write draws on imagery and symbolism found in the other four poems

I did the poem! I really liked it! Could you do any one that you like? I don't like telling people what to do lol

I looked at "Just Die"

Thank you

Hooray, I think the poem is finished!