Honest Feedback 1 for 2

Hey everyone,

- This Chunk Of Metal Holds Great Power

I would appreciate honest feedback on this poem. Please be as nasty as you want, as i want to be improve my poetry writing skills. Please no one liners, i want comments that show youve acttually read the poem.
In return ill do 2 of your poems. If you want specific poems done then leave titles. Please dont leave explicit... I odnt have anything againts them but.. theyre not my thing..

Oh i would also appreciate more feedback on;

- Peaceful Blue, A Gentle Breeze

If you also do this poem ill do 3 of your poems. Same conditions as stated above.

Thank you!
Ill get to your poems ASAP.
xx

Will do u can pick anyones u want I'll do them both

Done...
Thank you. :)
xx

I did This Chunk Of Metal Holds Great Powe, I'll try to do Peaceful Blue, A Gentle Breeze, If you could do any I'd be happy :D

Done. Great poem!
Please do
Caleb Scott(Acrostic)
Shortcut to Hell
Thanks :D

SkYwEe
Ive done your poems. Great reads. :)
Thanks for your comemnts.
xx

Alright, i'll do yours.

The Clown and Nevre Wake please :)

Ill do yours, i only have 2 poems for u to do, so yea

Cool stuff.
Will you comment on my
Unknown (Song)
and
Into the Heart (battle)