Tear me apart.

Comment on any of my poems,
but please do it truthfully.
If you liked it, please tell me WHY you liked it.
If not, tell me what you didn't like and how you think I cna improve. No one-liners here, I am looking for improvement.
Thanks
Kelsea

Nothing wrong with honest answers

Ha, I changed the 'headr' to heard. When I wrote it, the edit thing wasn't working, but it is now, so yay :]
Thank you

Anyone else?