A very specific Critque..............................!!!!

.I have written a poem with which I am getting mixed responses...and also getting confused myself. Some say they like it, but they dont know what they like about it. The rest say its really trying to be "Keats" or "Yeats".

Can u tell me some things about it...here is the poem.

http://www.best-love-poems.com/poems.php?id=884105

IN RETURN FOR THIS CRITIQUE....:

You will get comments on whichever poems you request me.
Just leave it there with the comments....

Firstly, PLEASE be honest in crituiqing. I wont feel bad.

Secondly, if you dont mind taking some harsh contructive critisism, tell me particularly, so that I will be able to comment on your poems much better.

Any questions pl PM me...
and all critiques must be made as comments.

Now, what I would like to know is...most people said that everything until "what is this that echoes" is fine.

That second last stanza...is really trying to be sophesticated. Well, I think that metaphor fits in...but I had to think really hard myself, after some time to arrive at its meaning. So would it just be better if I made it simpler? Or would it be better to keep it, modify it.

In the metaphor, I'm trying to say that even when poets are hurt very little, they often make a big deal out of it...(but not always, sometimes it really DOES hurt that bad)...but then he always gets happy again, so you shouldnt worry." Thats what I'm trying to say.

Ofcourse, its a poem about how I cannot believe that she's stopped loving me, written in a tone such that what I'm saying isnt true...is this evident by itself, or does the title make it so? Would it be better if I changed the title to something less suggestive, so as to keep the interest of the reader glued on?

Can you tell me...I'm confused...thank you....

Thank you.
Please Be Quick.
Dhaval....

Harsh review of Silent Whisper please lol meaning please don't be like everyone here with one liners

Kali! I know you! lol....I miss talking to youuu...hehe...I'll be on it...might comment in a while...but reading it now ;)

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No....I'm back in CCP...lol...was there for a while though

Others please look this up!

Harsh comment on abused child 1, 2, and 3 or at least 1. thanks

Harsh comment, dearest.

Hello, Little Girl
Her Majesty
Carry That Weight
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