New poem this dream.. 1for2?

Hey i have a new poem "this dream" and id really like some feedback on it. comment it (no one liners and be truthful)and ill comment any two poems of your choice.

thanks! :] and leave titles here :]

Done liz :]]

Could you please do?
-Seasons In The Sun
-Nothing But A Child

Thanks alot
Have a nice day,
Laura

Anymore?!?!