Only have 1 vote on this poem

I wrote "A foe you'll never know" a while ago and have only gotten a single vote. I was just hoping to get a few more votes and comments if anyone wanted to. It's not my regular style but anyways thanks to all who help out. laters.

Ok i will could u vote and maybe comment on his forgotten birthday

Ill rate 3 of ours if u'll tell me which is better of mine: searching or searching(revised)