Lifehouse! :]

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First Time [Glosa Verse]
By: Ciao

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I loved this, words can not explain how much this poem hit me. Every line in it was so descriptive, the imagery was amazing in this piece. You tied in the lines from the song very well, the flow was a little bit off at some parts, but nothing too serious. Great job. :]
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Content - 8/10 ; 80%
Spelling & Grammar - 9.5/10 ; 95%
Appeal - 8.7/10 ; 87%
Flow - 8.2/10 ; 82%
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Hanging By A Moment
By:Carrie

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LoveloveLOVED this poem. Wow. There were a few parts in it that threw me off, but it quickly pulled me back in again. The last stanza in this is just amazing, a perfect ending. :]
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Content - 9.4/10 ; 94%
Spelling & Grammar - 10/10 ; 100%
Appeal - 9.8/10 ; 98%
Flow - 9.2/10 ; 92%
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Somewhere Inbetween
By: Jordan
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I loved this, you picked a great topic to write about and you wrote it very well. There were a few spelling and grammar mistakes here and there, but other than that I couldn`t find anything else to complain about with this one. By far the best I`ve read of yours so far. :]
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Content - 9.8/10 ; 98%
Spelling & Grammar - 9.6/10 ; 96%
Appeal - 9.8/10 ; 98%
Flow - 9.7/10 ; 97%

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Just Another Name
By: Jordan

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Well, I stand corrected now, this is by far the best I have read from you. The imagery was amazing and the wording flowed together so perfectly, I got lost in the lines of this one, it pulled me in and kept me in until the end. LOVED it. :]
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Content - 10/10 ; 100%
Spelling & Grammar - 9.7/10 ; 97%
Appeal - 9.4/10 ; 94%
Flow - 9.7/10 ; 97%

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Chapter One
By: Jordan
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Another great one, there are a few things that threw off the flow...like added words, but there wasn`t anything that really bothered me to the point of not wanting to read on.. great job. :]
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Content - 9.3/10 ; 93%
Spelling & Grammar - 9.5/10 ; 95%
Appeal - 9.7/10 ; 97%
Flow - 9.6/10 ; 96%
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Sky is falling
By: NyellMoonlight
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I found it hard to follow at parts, it was a little off to me. There were some spelling and grammar mistakes, other than that it was alright. It has potential, you just need to fix a few things in it is all. :]
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Content - 8/10 ; 80%
Spelling & Grammar - 7/10 ; 70%
Appeal - 6.5/10 ; 65%
Flow - 7.2/10 ; 72%

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Days Go By
By: Carrie
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I loved this, you have a way with words that just send shivers right through me, all of your poems, whether meant to be inspirational or not, inspire me. Your flow can be off, but I`ll be so consumed by your words that I don`t even notice, that to me, is good poetry. :]
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Content - 9.7/10 ; 97%
Spelling & Grammar - 9/10 ; 90%
Appeal - 10/10 ; 100%
Flow - 9.6/10 ; 96%

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Hanging By A Moment
By:Britt
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I love the descriptions in this poem, they blew me away. I`m left speechless from this, as always by your poems, great job Dear ! :]
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Content - 10/10 ; 100%
Spelling & Grammar - 9/10 ; 90%
Appeal - 9.8/10 ; 98%
Flow - 10/10 ; 100%
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End Has Only Begun [Nove Otto]
By:Britt
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The lines are so short but yet hold so much emotion, I love that in your poetry -- no matter the length, it always strikes me. :]
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Content - 9.6/10 ; 96%
Spelling & Grammar - 9/10 ; 90%
Appeal - 9.8/10 ; 98%
Flow - 10/10 ; 100%
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Just Another Name
By:Ciao
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LOVE it, I can relate to is so well right now, as I`m sure many others can...a great thing to find in a poem that you read. You never enter a poem that I read and shrug my shoulders and say "meh" , they`re always so unique and they ALWAYS blow me away ! Great job, :]
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Appeal - 10/10 ; 100%
Flow - 9.8/10 ; 98%
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WALKING AWAY
By: Emmerz
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I loved the poem, but I felt like it could have been a little longer. The ending two lines were just thrown in there out of nowhere, so it needed to have a little more description before the last two were pushed in. Other than that, I loved the overall feeling and wording of the poem, great job. :]
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Content - 8/10 ; 80%
Spelling & Grammar - 7.5/10 ; 75%
Appeal - 7/10 ; 70%
Flow - 9.6/10 ; 96%
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We'll Never Know (You and Me) [Lyrics]
By:Ciao
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I LOVE these lyrics, they`re amazing, but else can I expect from you? The imagery is perfect and the wording that tied it in together really did a good job at doing so. Keep it up Darling, :]
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Content - 9.5/10 ; 95%
Spelling & Grammar - 9.6/10 ; 96%
Appeal - 9.8/10 ; 98%
Flow - 9.6/10 ; 96%
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Days Go By
By: Ciao
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A great terzanelle, there were just one or two things that were a little off in it but nothing that really bothered me. Great job. :]
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Content - 9.3/10 ; 93%
Spelling & Grammar - 9.7/10 ; 97%
Appeal - 9.6/10 ; 96%
Flow - 9.6/10 ; 96%
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Hanging By A Moment
By: Gem
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Well slap me silly, that was amazing ! I have no idea how you could say it was bad. Tsk tsk lol. If that was a true story of you two then that is the cutest thing and you explained it so well, great job Dear, really. :]
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Content - 10/10 ; 100%
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Appeal - 10/10 ; 100%
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Walking away
By: Infected
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It was a little awkward to read the first time I read it, it skips from one idea of being abused to her just leaving, I think one more stanza to add just a little more description to it so that it isn`t as confusing.
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Content - 7.3/10 ; 73%
Spelling & Grammar - 9.7/10 ; 97%
Appeal - 8.1/10 ; 81%
Flow - 9.8/10 ; 98%
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Make Me Perfect
By: Sheena
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Surprisingly, this started off kind of slow for me, but near the end, it hooked me in. You always have a way with your poetry of reeling me into what is being said, I love that. And yes, you are right, I did love the repetition :]
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Content - 9.6/10 ; 96%
Spelling & Grammar - 10/10 ; 100%
Appeal - 9.8/10 ; 98%
Flow - 9.6/10 ; 96%

First time(i love that song) please reserve me =]

Hanging By A Moment please

Walking away please.

*scream* lol, Hanging by a moment is mine and Marcus's song of all songs! First song we ever danced too! I have to do that one!! lol

=)

Awehh! That`s key-ute,
Lol, I love that song,
and you are reserved!

Awww Gem! Mine used to be You and Me... =\
Here ya go Jenna! :]
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First Time [Glosa Verse]

Lines from First Time by Lifehouse
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0WzqAvXmbYU

We're both looking for something we've been afraid to find.
For once in my life, I'm scared to death.
Maybe I'm wrong, I'm feeling right.
Like being in love, to feel, for the first time.
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Tear drops splatter on my favorite guitar,
As I sit here, dreaming, wondering how you are.
Your voice is the melody of my favorite song;
The lyrics help to guide me through what is right and wrong.
We're riding phone lines, just to see what we can find -
Wondering if my head is right; you're the image that comes to mind.
Past mistakes just melt away; the heartbreak isn't spoken -
No one wants to dwell on times when we were lost or broken.
So release all inhibitions; let's just free our minds;
"We're both looking for something we've been afraid to find."

It took us too long to realize that what we held was true -
How could it be anything else? All I can see is you.
Sure, there may be distance - but we're not that far apart;
Maybe just in miles, but never in our hearts.
So let's take this plunge and we'll hold our breath;
I'm not afraid to admit that I'm scared half to death -
But I know I'll have you to hold my hand through it all,
And I know that you would catch me, if I began to fall.
So jump in, here we go, as I'm holding my breath,
"For once in my life, I'm scared to death."

You tell me that I'm on your mind - well you're all that's in my head -
I smile with all the memories; I laugh at the jokes you said.
Your kisses felt like thunder, I got lightning in my veins -
You're my antidote to a broken heart; the cure to all my pain.
Never have I known something to be so right -
I would never give you up without putting up a fight.
Some tell me that I'm crazy, they don't know how I feel -
While the rest if the world is fake, you are the one who's real.
So just stay here, with me, and let us save tonight.
"Maybe I'm wrong, I'm feeling right."

So we'll ride these phone lines, hoping for that day,
The day when we can finally do what we always say -
So let's get these hearts beating a little faster,
As I pray for this one not to end in disaster.
But knowing you and me, I know we'll be fine,
And I know that soon, it'll finally be our time.
So keep me in your heart cause I could never let you go.
I just keep telling you that, making sure you know.
It's amazing how I feel, I hope that you don't mind.
"Like being in love, to feel, for the First Time."
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Glosa-Verse: A Spanish form invented by court poets in the 14th and 15th centuries. An opening quatrain, called a 'cabeza' is chosen from another poet, or song. The glosa elaborates or 'glosses' on the quatrain with four ten line stanzas, their concluding lines taken consecutively from the quatrain and their sixth and ninth lines rhyming with the borrowed tenth.

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Hanging By A Moment

Dream a little dream,
When your hanging by the seams,
Everything's all gone,
And the silence it just screams.

Nothing seems as real,
As those moments that we steal,
Tucked away inside,
To touch when we can't feel.

Don't let life get away,
We must live it everyday,
Tomorrow is a maybe,
What matters is today.

Hanging by a moment,
Drifting on a star,
Everything you want to be,
Is everything you are.

^^ what a sad song... V.V

I'll write: "Sky Is Falling"

Days Go By please

*Sky is falling* by NyellMoonlight

Nobody possess these shattered pictures,
iced memories of tangled moments.
I keep this wracked song on replay
like a hymn for the greatness of the fall.

Brake the thin veil of colored glass
that separate our souls; parallel worlds,
so what? We'll meet each other in some
illusive revolve, somewhere in between.

Nothingness is consumed by my words
- I developed an addiction for spilling them around.
Who truly cares if my worlds end?
Who will come to say "I'm sorry?"?

The sky is falling, no surprise-
the highest you get, the fall will be longer;
Announcements do not make any sense at all...
In disbelief, I'm learning to understand...

...falling down within blue expanse,
just to end alone in the depths of hell;
but that hollow place edged with fuming fires
entwines the worlds...so come along, let's die together

Days Go By

As the sun melts into heaven
The sky's a rosy haze
Your eyes fade back into the past
Your soul is set ablaze

The times you laughed until you cried
Or cried until you bled
Locked away inside your mind
Trapped inside your head

Time could always heal your wounds
But where has it all gone
Your youth is far behind you now
The sands of time withdrawn

Forever seemed so far away
But now it feels so near
You never thought you'd be afraid
Taste that bitter fear

Dying's not what scares you most
It's what you leave unsaid
The way you've made your loved ones feel
The ripples you did spread

Was your time and were your actions
Reason to believe
That life is worth the smiles and pain
That feeling comes to weave

Okay Jenna. I needed a challenge.
I will choose 3 more titles.
Just Another Name
Days Go By
We'll Never Know (You and Me)

^^I combined two titles in that one.
Harder To Breathe is like a stanza away from being completed. :]

READY? SET? GO! lmao
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Just Another Name

All I am is just another name to you,
I'm a memory of what you went through.
Like a notch in a bedpost, I'm a marker in your life -
Each one is similar, but no two are alike.
Mark a date on your calander; it's another goodbye -
It seems to get easier with each one you try.
You no longer get attached - feelings just aren't for you -
So you continue to break hearts; it's just what you do.
Tears are just scars I can wash away with time -
Yet each one reminds you, you're feeding me such lines.
But you've done it so much, it just comes so easy;
So maybe once I'm gone, you'll actually miss me.
I was so different, not like those dime-a-dozen fakes -
But it was too late for you to realize your mistakes.
Even though each on of us are alike, we're all not the same,
But all I'll ever be to you is Just Another Name.

Hoping i dont have to reserve... but i may add some more later, before tonight, if im in a writing mood.

WALKING AWAY

I was the first one, and dont you forget
The days that passed by since the day that you left
Until that one day when I picked up the phone
I was the strong one; No longer alone

Then we grew into the perfect team
Were masked from the past, only had one dream
I wanted you there as a part of my life
Then you opened my heart, cutting down with a knife

I always forgave when you played the same line
Up until today, everything was just fine
Now I hate your excuses, your daily disguise,
The broken promises, and constant lies

To tell you the truth, that's all I will say
Holding my head high, I am walking away.

We'll Never Know (You and Me) [Lyrics]

Verse 1:
You tied me up with a string, just to keep me holding on,
You spun such lies and sugar-coated life, but I knew all along.
I played your game, but I held the ace, and look at who has won -
So continue to think you have the royal flush, I'll be having the fun.
The web of lies you decided to spin are oh, so intricate,
And I don't think you'll ever come clean; I don't think you'll ever admit.
Give up, you lose, pack up and go home -
'Cause if I must be lonely, I'd much rather be alone.
You thought that Id' be different, but how right, you did not know;
I hid my heart up my sleave, where no one dared to go.

Chorus:
We'll never know what we could've been -
Now I've learned how, how not to give in.
You'll never show someone all you can be.
I guess we'll never know about, you and me.

Verse 2:
Dangling, I spun, but I did it just for fun -
You didn't know all along that I was already done.
No more holding onto hopes and to empty dreams,
Because my life is so much more than it seems.
Cliches are just that; broken hearts aren't for me -
I can do better and be all I can be.
Someone will love me for just who I am;
Someone will care and they will understand.
But for now, I'll leave you with just one thought:
Don't let me be the one that you somehow forgot.

Chorus:
We'll never know what we could've been -
Now I've learned how, how not to give in.
You'll never show someone all you can be.
I guess we'll never know about, you and me.

Bridge:
Broken-down hearts in need of something more -
Gradually learning it's too much to just ignore.

Chorus:
We'll never know what we could've been -
Now I've learned how, how not to give in.
You'll never show someone all you can be.
I guess we'll never know about, you and me.

We'll never know what we could've been -
Now I've learned how, how not to give in.
You'll never show someone all you can be.
I guess we'll never know about, you and me.

Days Go By [Terzanelle]

Time passes so slowly now that I'm really alone -
Wishing and hoping that you will come back one day;
Sitting in this place, I guess I should've known.

People come through but I don't hear what they say,
They are not sharing the same dream -
Wishing and hoping that you will come back one day.

Life passes by and nothing is what it seems -
Day one days one thing, but it's different the next;
They are not sharing the same dream.

I'm broken apart; physically a wreck -
I'm living my life, day by day, on a prayer;
Day one days one thing, but it's different the next.

I'm seeing things each day that aren't really there,
As you're off fighting in this awful war -
I'm living my life, day by day, on a prayer.

Days Go By and my heart is so sore -
As you're off fighting in this awful war,
Time passes so slowly now that I'm really alone -
Sitting in this place, I guess I should've known.

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Terzanelle
The Terzanelle is a poetry type which is a combination of the villanelle and the terza rima forms. It is a 19-line poem consisting of five interlocking triplets/tercets plus a concluding quatrain in which the first and third lines of the first triplet appear as refrains. The middle line of each triplet is repeated, reappearing as the last line
of the succeeding triplet with the exception of the center line of the next-to-the-last stanza which appears in the quatrain. The rhyme and refrain scheme for the triplets is as follows:

1. A
2. B
3. A

4. b
5. C
6. B

7. c
8. D
9. C

10. d
11. E
12. D

13. e
14. F
15. E

16. f
17. F
18. A
19. A

Xx Hanging By A Moment xX

She's hanging by a moment, suspended in time
Watching from the window, thoughts lost in her mind
The rain patters gently, a comforting sound
Falling from the heavens, splashing on the ground

A hurricane of questions, overwhelms her brain
Yet it only took one to drive her insane
All that was needed was a simple yes or no
Instead she had mumbled that she had to go

Etched in her mind was the memory of his face
When she'd hurried away as if running a race
The hurt and confusion in his eyes was so clear
How could she have hurt someone so dear

She heard a door open and the sound of footsteps
So she braced herself for his outburst of upset
In a flurry of raindrops and wind from outside
He came rushing in like a great ocean tide

"Darling, i'm sorry i scared you so bad
It's just you're the best thing in life i've had
But i'll wait for you sweetheart, you just take your time
I'll be hanging by a moment 'til you give me the sign"

She took in his appearance, his eyes full of hope
He was asking for her love, not rushing to elope
She knew then and there what her answer would be
And surprised, even herself, by dropping to one knee

"You're all that i want honey, out of this life
So please do me the honor of making me your wife"
He gave a smile she hadn't realised she'd missed
"Nothing would make me happier." He smiled with a kiss

*Gem*
Copyright©GemmaStott2007
20.39

(So sorry it's late. I'm still not happy with it now. I'm so disappointed with myself over this. But i tried so enjoy, lmao)

Mmkay, this is now closed. I will
satart judging in a bit so people
have until tomorrow to get their
poems in or until I am done judging,
I will check back for them every
so often. :]

I have an old poem called "Make Me Perfect" instead of "Make Me Over". Same idea, though, luckily.

Would it be all right if that was added, or no? It's all right if you don't want it. ^^
xox.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

Yes, you can add it, I will check
back for it every so often.

Sorry I forgot about this.
And I haven't been on here much lately.
But I will try and get it done now.

Its not great sorry.
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Walking away

No one will ever know
What he puts her through
She hides her bruises
They have no clue

She makes up excuses
And feels ashamed
She is feeling worthless
He is to be blamed

She can't take it no more
The kicks and hits
She knows she need to leave
This, she admits

She is walking away from this
Needs to leave this place
He wont stop her now
No more bruises on her face

[[I like the repetition of the words..I hope you do too.]]

Make Me Perfect

Make me perfect, make me your doll,
Hold me close, and I will not fall.
Make me just like an endless time,
Make me perfect, a thoughtless crime.

No one's perfect; I am a twist,
Hold me close, and I won't be missed.
I am finally at perfect prime,
Make me perfect, a thoughtless crime.

Now caress such a perfect face,
A perfect thought, not perfect waste.
But, this will only take some time,
Make me perfect, a thoughtless crime.

Make me perfect, make me your doll,
Make me perfect, a thoughtless crime.

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Kyrielle Sonnet consists of 14 lines (three rhyming quatrain stanzas and a non-rhyming couplet).
Just like the traditional Kyrielle poem, the Kyrielle Sonnet also has a repeating line or phrase as a
refrain (usually appearing as the last line of each stanza). Each line within the Kyrielle Sonnet
consists of only eight syllables. French poetry forms have a tendency to link back to the beginning
of the poem, so common practice is to use the first and last line of the first quatrain as the ending
couplet. This would also re-enforce the refrain within the poem. Therefore, a good rhyming scheme
for a Kyrielle Sonnet would be:

AabB, ccbB, ddbB, AB -or- AbaB, cbcB, dbdB, AB.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

Once again, this was a very difficult contest for me to judge. So many great poems, so little placings...

First - Jordan ; Just Another Name [10]
Second - Ciao ; We`ll Never Know (You and Me) [5]
Third - Gem ; Hanging By a Moment [3]
HM - Carrie ; Days Go By [2]
HM - Sheena ; Make Me Perfect & Emmerz ; Walking Away [2]

Please PM me your titles and I will get them done ASAP. :]

Congrats winners!! thanks jenna! :love:

Wheeee! lol Yay!