I'd really like some feedback...

There are two poems that I'd really like some feedback on. I won't promise that I'll read one of yours in return; I may and I may not.

I really want ppl to read my poems because they want me too, not because they want something in exchange. :)

I'd really love it if you included actual feedback in the comments instead of just "wow...." or "that was just awful D:"

thanks!!^^