Desperately seeking feedback

I really want feedback on my newest poem - I'm predominantly looking for more experienced members to comment it.
As I'm looking at making it a 4 part poem.

If any experienced poetry writers would care to look at it, i will happily return the favour twofold.
(Leave titles please)

Title - Seasonal ABC's [Tongue Twister]

Thanks in advance.

~Pete.

Sorry it took me a while. That one is done, feel free to PM me with your second title.

Nice work Britt, wonderful poems. Oh how I envy your deepy twisted mind.

Any others that comment now I will catch up on in the morning - it's bedtime for me.