Ello! Request for Honest Critics!

Hi everyone. I understand how most of you are all busy, but if you have the time, would you please check out my poems? I would also appreciate it greatly if some of you could comment and critic it with what you REALLY think. To be truthful, I don't want you to say its good. I would like to know what you think, and how I could improve it. Thank you!

PS: I will be sure to check out your poems if you want me to!!! ^^
http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/author.html?id=297648

I commented about 3 of your poems. Can you comment my 2 newest poems?

They are:
"Too Lost In You"
"If This World Were Mine"

Thanks in advance.

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Kays. It shall be done! And thanks to both of you for commenting so honestly!!! I really loved the reviews!!! <3

There you go hunny. Can you please give me an honest comment as well on "As Blood Runs Black". Thanks :]