1 for 4: "a bridge between two eyes" [lento]

I'm trying new styles of poems and would like insight on this one. Please give me constructive feedback and more than a one-liner and I will happily r/r/c 4 of your poems.

One-liners will only receive 2 comments or less
First 5 people only (due to the fact I hate not giving people back there comments and am always on a time crunch so 5 people is doable)

Please and thank you!

Hello I did....can you please check out mines

I'm on my way.

Just wanted to reserve my spot first, lol.

I just commented and rated it. Can you please do:

"Sweet Love"
"The Pain of Losing You"
"Brown Eyed Girl
"If This World Were Mine"

Doing it now. :] My latest four please but you could just do the latest two if you give nice honest and in depth comments.

I will of course give honest poems a little bit later today because its my friends court date, but thank you everybody who wrote comments, you will be seeing comments from me for you by the end of the day! :)

Done =] please comment my latest ones

Oh i didnt realize it was only five people n/m u dont have to comment back if u cant