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MY EMOTIONAL DEATH
Pain..hurt..tears..deepness..coldness..fear..yelling..screaming..cursing..hitting..emotions..shivering..your mind crying out in agony of words that were only meant for those who are unloved..heart throbbing tears that choke the voice from your throat..shoulders slumped almost to your chest..head hanging down so low to ur kness..eyes closed so tight u feel the blood trickle between your lids..each word a stab of a dirty knife so deep into your soul..stomach in knots trying to keep from throwing up on yourself..hands reaching down to hold yourself from falling over from the emotional blows..blackness inside your thoughts as ur inner soul struggles to run to a release from the blows..wondering back to the times when the words were of love..now the words like gunfire jerking your body back and forth..quietness engulfs the room as a door slams shut..eyes, caked with emotional blood slowly creeps open..broken glass, torn drapes..destroyed love clears up in front of your thoughts..falling forever in a black abyess of nothingness, no bottom to rest on..mouth trying to scream, no words coming forth..slowly,slowly,slowly I die...I die...I die.