Comments : Evil Breeds

  • 16 years ago

    by debbylyn

    "Light thought to be found
    Struggled to reach for years
    Extinguished in minutes
    Bringing back lost fears"

    ^We have to look beyond our fears to find what is real......beauty lies within the heart and soul and can't be extinguished by even the sharpest of tongues! I know how you feel....we love you! Great job on expressing you angst in verse!

  • 16 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Takes ones dreams of hope
    To make themselves strong
    Pain awaits future doom
    For all their past wrongs

    I know from where its coming and i totally agree with you. Very nicely written dear, glad you released.

    all the best and take care

  • 16 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Cindy,

    Some evil people thrive on the pleasure they get from inflicting pain upon others.
    There is only one way to deal with this: turn away from them and ignore them. They brought it upon themselves and deserve no better. In ancient times this was the worst punishment conceivable: to be excluded from the community. I too use this punishment when someone deserves it.

    Love, Ingrid

  • 16 years ago

    by Nina09

    OMG!! I really love this one it is really great!

  • 16 years ago

    by Lu

    Darkness surrounds mind
    Happiness flew away
    Words spit serpents tongue
    Changed it all in a day
    ^^^
    Cindy my dear friend ...
    Serpent <---- At the gate's of heaven the serpent's tongue shall be cut and the soul will be delivered the punishment due.

    And you my friend <----- will still have the beautiful soul as your earthly body has today.

    Light thought to be found
    Struggled to reach for years
    Extinguished in minutes
    Bringing back lost fears
    ^^^
    Sweet friend do not allow (anyone) to steal away the things you worked so hard to accomplish.

    Evil hearts poisonous
    Shallow minds seem to breed
    Stomping destroy the weak
    Fulfilling their own greed
    ^^^
    An evil heart may be poisonous hun but a beautiful heart stands taller and walks prouder and at the end of the day can say "I am a good person" ....

    Takes ones dreams of hope
    To make themselves strong
    Pain awaits future doom
    For all their past wrongs
    ^^^
    And their past wrongs shall be met with punishment.

    My Aunt before she died of complications on the operating table during heart surgery and lived a very painful life for near 10 years .... always said
    "I carry this cross for a reason" and she always believed that she carried that cross because it meant another member of her family would live a better life. (Perhaps free of pain and suffering) and she carried that cross with dignity until her dieing day. And back then it did not make much sense to me but now I find it to hold much truth.

    Cindy free the serpent from you loving, caring, compassionate mind .... there is no room for her evil self there. Because simply .... you are much better than she will ever be.
    Love ya hun
    Luanne

  • 16 years ago

    by XxSINISTERxX

    GREAT POEM 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    ^Takes ones dreams of hope
    To make themselves strong
    Pain awaits future doom
    For all their past wrongs^

    Hopefully in the end these kind of people will get what they deserve. It takes a special kind of person to think outside their box without assumptions and bias. You have done a good job conveying the kind of personality some people unfortunately have.

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    This is excellently written. You managed to say so much and to convey the message greatly in just four short stanzas which is truly impressive. I like your choice of words is every stanza and the flow which is truly flawless. This is an enjoyable read, remarkable dark piece portrayed with haunting atmosphere.
    My favorite stanza is;

    - Darkness surrounds mind
    Happiness flew away
    Words spit serpents tongue
    Changed it all in a day-
    ^^^
    Very powerful opening stanza, it pulled me straight into this piece.

    All in all, very effective from the beginning to the end.

    Keep writing!

  • 16 years ago

    by Shanice Jones

    You shouldny let things bring you down... you should turn to the lord and he would take care of everything