Heya
i know this aint the one you asked for
but i thought i would read it also
glad i did also
tis a great poem
real emotion to it
hope the other one im gonna read is
just as great
but i have a feeling it will blow this one out of the water
good job

Keenan

Sad deep and dark, i really like this the flow was excellent, not a word out of place, the word choice was amazing, vocab was brillant, nicely penned, i like your work, and I think u are vey talented, to write so well at 14, I am jealous. 5/5 for a perfect peice

The words are so strong.
The last line, I love it. :)
A 5/5!!

This is an excellent poem...strong and powerful.. the flow was perfect at the beginning and in the middle but near the end it kinda fell apart....some of the lines on the last stanza were too long..

but this is good...i think it still deserves a 5/5.

Wow! this is really really good...it had some anger behind it...

the flow was great but i do agree with ^^the person above..near the end some of the lines were a bit long...but i still enjoyed the read. 5/5 still as deserved.

An exalent poem with such strong emotion I really enjoyed reading this one.

Wow, I like it a lot, you expressed your emotions excellently. The wording in the whole piece is great, and the flow is very good, too.
My favorite stanza is:
-The tear's behind the memory,
Are like an ever burning flame.
Killing me from within,
And burning away my shame.-

Keep up, 5/5 from me

The poem was good; however, I got lost in the last stanza. I blame alot of that on me though.

I can relate alot to the first stanza. It seems that alot of times both tears and memories are a burning flame that leaves us lost in the wilderness.

--Sher

The tear's behind the memory,
`Shouldn't be an apostrophe there .

Bring me closer too my doom.
`Wrong "too" . There's only one o in the way you're using that word .

My will too live gone
`Same thing for that "too."

Other than those small mistakes, the poem was very good . Within those three stanzas, can be said for a lot of different situations and they portray different emotions all in one short poem .

Well done .
..__MiNDYY

I enjoy it very much..the words flow smoothly..well keep it up^^

Great
greatly written a very strong poem in emotion and style.
as always it was another wonderful poem by you, i like any poem that deal with tears cause i consider tear as my only friend as when we have a problam, its the only thing that come to us rather than leave us alone.

Great poem, lots of feeling, flowed fairly well. I like your style, no holds barred lol. short but sweet, with a clear thoughtful message. good luck and keep writing. 5 from me

Wow.. that is very touching. I think we all know the loss of someone dear to us.. and it hurts a lot.. but the pain slowly fades away. Good Job

.:Danielle:.

Sweetie, this was awesome! Sad, yet beautifully written, every line flowed so well.
loved it.
love Tara-Kay
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Thanks for the comment =D. and wow, this is very very well writen I can relate.. great work.
5/5

XxChelseaxX

This is a great poem. it is just as amazingly written as all of your other poems. 5/5

Kalee

"I lost you with a kiss of pain" that to me is deep. This poem is very deep and i like it. 5/5

I thought this was really good and some times i think im dead

First off, I loved the title! This piece deep and meaningful. The emotions was strong and captivating.

"I lost you with a kiss of pain"
^beautifull

*5/5*

This is a really good poem...felt every word of it.