chavii ( F C D )
at 2007-10-15
Awwwww so beautiful and cute poem, like our child fantasies in which we live, i have fallen in love with it !!
Bravo!
*Charisma* ( F P C D )
at 2007-10-15
Awww! I love fairytale poems! You did a great job!
Charisma*
Deana ( F P C D )
at 2007-10-15
This is beautiful Gem,It takes me back to being a little girl at an amusement park.Wouldn`t it be great if the world could really be this way. excellent work!
DarkSpirit ( F C D )
at 2007-10-15
Wow, quite impressing piece, it has fantastic topic and you created truly excellent atmosphere in it. Rhythm is really beautiful in whole poem and it has great message. Good imagery is mixed with superbly described emotions, really deep. Rhyming is also totally unique and refreshing. Well done! I really can't chose favorite stanza, I like them all.
[ Praised by : Ann Marie ]
Twisted Illusion ( F P C D )
at 2007-10-15
Huni, this is amazing. It's really beautiful. I love it. The imaginary you used is excellent and the words you chose spatacular. Amazing, amazing piece.
xDanikax
Take Care
xxoxoxx
AblissfulDREAMER ( F C D )
at 2007-10-15
How beautiful! I couldnt help but smile all throughout the poem. The language you used was so sweet and the imagery you created was one I yearn to escape too.
One thing that kinda rubbed me wrong
"Pixies and fairies are all flying high
Scattering pixie dust over your head"
The use of the word pixie twice kinda threw off the flow.
Well done *5/5*
[ Praised by : Sher ]
What Else Can I Do ( F P C )
at 2007-10-15
Wow thats cute i like this ... i like the last stanza it great... 5/5
Viola x LaughLoveLive x ( F P C D )
at 2007-10-15
Aww this is just so sweet. I love all that imagery there. It really paint a beautiful picture in my mind.
This stanza especially is just wonderful:
"The glitter carousel is waiting to start
Shimmering unicorns beg you to take part
The organ strikes up a tinkling tune
About a little cow who jumped over the moon"
But really the whole thing is so impressive. The flow is good, your choice of words is perfect and so very descriptive. Really made me smile. Great work! =] keep it up.
--Viola
p.s. Thanks for the comment on my poem hun. It means a lot. :)
[ Praised by : Sher ]
HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG ( F P C D )
at 2007-10-15
Oh my good word. I`m speechless. This has got to be my favorite from you. Everything about this is just perfect. The imagery, the wording, the story line, the mood, the symbols, metaphors and similes lol...my goodness. This poem is AMAZING.
5.5
:]
Asrana ( F C )
at 2007-10-16
This is so imaginative and descriptive Gem, such beautiful imagery! I can just picture this beautiful place with all this magic happening! Hope you don't mind if I print this out and read it to my kids tonight at bed time... It will probably take at least 10 minutes to get through with all there excited interruptions... 5/5
NyellMoonlight ( F P C D )
at 2007-10-16
Wow, this really impress me... So beautiful and descriptive. The imagery that you created is great and so vivid. I like this piece from the beginning to the end, it is very original and creative.
Your choice of words in it is absolutely fantastic.
You have true talent!
Keep up!
5/5 from me
Gamaliel munoz
at 2007-10-16
Nice lol i saw the title and i had to see it lol you know what funny thow am going to think of this poem next time i kiss some one lol
LOVE IT
5\5
Pete ( F P C D )
at 2007-10-16
Wonderfully imaginative work. This place sounds like the wonderland all little girls would dream of. Such amazing imagery used throughout.
It takes such a good imagination to write about something like this. You not only pulled it off amazingly, but made us boys want to visit this place too!
Just one thing ..
"Pink candy floss cloads float lazily past"
should be " Pink candy floss clouds.."
Wonderful rhyme structure.
Beautiful imagery.
Imaginative topic.
Just simply an amazing piece.
[6/5] < No Typo
~Pete.
[ Praised by : Ann Marie ]
xXx SeCrEt WiSh xXx ( F P C D )
at 2007-10-16
Oh holy crap.
This is frigging awesome.
I don't even know what to say...
Gem, this poem is amazing.
The content, the concept, imagery wording and flow..they all come together to create a truly beautiful read.
Your flow is flawless throughout the entire piece, while the opening stanza was beautifully done, it pulls the reader right in and from there it just gets even better.
There isn't a thing I would change about this.
Amazing job with this.
Cindy ( F P C D )
at 2007-10-16
Gem
What a beautiful magical piece you have penned.
Excellent read to share with the kids.
I loved it.
Love Cindy
Đeѕтіиγѕ Pαіи ( F C )
at 2007-10-16
Wow. That was such a nice and cute poem, brought back memories of childhood, I LOVED it! Kepp up the great work :)
Gasttlee ( F P C D )
at 2007-10-16
There is an amazing sparkle in this poem! It just stands out in a beautiful way! 5/5
Dark Secrets ( F C D )
at 2007-10-17
OMG ... I just can't find any words to express my feelings ... I gotta put this one in my favourites
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