Lemma! Oh my gosh! I ADORE this porm. Yes yes yess I do. It was very simple, but this line absolutely did it for me. "Don't worry honey; I'm not gonna cry." <--- Best line I've read all day.

As I feel I can take it no more.
^^I think you should put it as: "As I feel I can't take it anymore" Oh, and I think you meants "can't" instead of "can"

Cayce xx

***poem o.o I almost wrote porn.

LOL you make me laugh XD

I think I had it as "As I feel I can take it no more" in the first place and then changed it. I'll go change it back right away =)

xXx

I luv this poem its so sad it reminds me of my dad leaving me and my mom

Hey this is a greqat poem sad :(

Omg
this poem is so strong
i can relate to it
i added it to my fav's

Pretending is all anyone can seem to do lately.
This was great. Flow and rhythem were not over done.
5/5

Wow i love this poem... its so sad... i've said the exact same things before... and i've done the exact opposite... great job.5/5

Wow. This was amazing, simply amazing. The emotions were just radiating off of the words, and the flow was flawless. I really love the repetition of "I tell you', it added a little something extra to the poem. Beautiful job. :) Overall: 5.5

- Steph.

I can feel the pain in this, the message was a simple, on point and never strayed. 5/5

This is really cool I like the controdicting part of this whole poem it throws sort of an edge on the whole thing. This is awesome
5/5

Oooh loved this one...I think you should seperate it into stanzas to make it alittle nicer to read. You should tweek the form a little but over all good job

Haha, really like this poem... Good job, I'm gonna look forward for another one :)
5/5

Wow, i love it. the contradicitng lines, really creative, brilliant!

Niice work. a 5/5 I must say. Very well done.

Sad but beautiful...good mix

Good job! i really liked the parallels/repeticion

This poem was amazing.....

I had a few moments here in there. great job keep it up. =]

SnAp Yo FiNgAs

SnAp SnAp

NIce.

I think it coulda been a little longer and the last line should have been a little stronger. but thats just my opinion.

I tell you that I'm not gonna cry
As tears run down my cheeks.

^ thats a great start. liked it. 5/5 for the starting.

you maybe should have made 2 stanzas not just one.

though overall its a very good poem. i like it :]

the idea behind it is very strong, and the irony and the imagery it shows is good.

keep up the really good work. xx amy