Comments : I'm not gonna cry

  • 9 years ago

    by Cayce

    Lemma! Oh my gosh! I ADORE this porm. Yes yes yess I do. It was very simple, but this line absolutely did it for me. "Don't worry honey; I'm not gonna cry." <--- Best line I've read all day.

    As I feel I can take it no more.
    ^^I think you should put it as: "As I feel I can't take it anymore" Oh, and I think you meants "can't" instead of "can"

    Cayce xx

  • 9 years ago

    by Cayce

    ***poem o.o I almost wrote porn.

  • 9 years ago

    by Lemma

    LOL you make me laugh XD

    I think I had it as "As I feel I can take it no more" in the first place and then changed it. I'll go change it back right away =)

    xXx

  • 9 years ago

    by XXXsuicidalgurlXXX

    I luv this poem its so sad it reminds me of my dad leaving me and my mom

  • 9 years ago

    by ShawdowDancer

    Hey this is a greqat poem sad :(

  • 9 years ago

    by Lizaveta

    Omg
    this poem is so strong
    i can relate to it
    i added it to my fav's

  • 9 years ago

    by EssenceOfLace

    Pretending is all anyone can seem to do lately.
    This was great. Flow and rhythem were not over done.
    5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Wow i love this poem... its so sad... i've said the exact same things before... and i've done the exact opposite... great job.5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Wow. This was amazing, simply amazing. The emotions were just radiating off of the words, and the flow was flawless. I really love the repetition of "I tell you', it added a little something extra to the poem. Beautiful job. :) Overall: 5.5

    - Steph.

  • 9 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    I can feel the pain in this, the message was a simple, on point and never strayed. 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Kaila

    This is really cool I like the controdicting part of this whole poem it throws sort of an edge on the whole thing. This is awesome
    5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by DirgeVenustas

    Oooh loved this one...I think you should seperate it into stanzas to make it alittle nicer to read. You should tweek the form a little but over all good job

  • 9 years ago

    by August

    Haha, really like this poem... Good job, I'm gonna look forward for another one :)
    5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Alexa Eudis

    Wow, i love it. the contradicitng lines, really creative, brilliant!

  • 9 years ago

    by Andy loves Jesus

    Niice work. a 5/5 I must say. Very well done.

  • 9 years ago

    by mandy

    Sad but beautiful...good mix

  • 9 years ago

    by 888Trinity888

    Good job! i really liked the parallels/repeticion

  • 9 years ago

    by Pink Romance

    This poem was amazing.....

    I had a few moments here in there. great job keep it up. =]

  • 9 years ago

    by Haitham

    SnAp Yo FiNgAs

    SnAp SnAp

    NIce.

  • 9 years ago

    by Gizmo

    I think it coulda been a little longer and the last line should have been a little stronger. but thats just my opinion.

    I tell you that I'm not gonna cry
    As tears run down my cheeks.

    ^ thats a great start. liked it. 5/5 for the starting.

    you maybe should have made 2 stanzas not just one.

    though overall its a very good poem. i like it :]

    the idea behind it is very strong, and the irony and the imagery it shows is good.

    keep up the really good work. xx amy