Comments : Your Mental Game

  • 10 years ago

    by mandy

    Three words... I... LOVE...IT!
    it has an awsome rhyme to it,
    and it's really, really empowering!
    awsome job i can really understand
    what you mean. Lovely use of words,
    5/5 with no doubt about it!!!

  • 10 years ago

    by Becca

    This poem really means a lot to me, because i've recently been going through something like that. I don't know if its exactly the same thing, but i could really relate to it, and i thought you did a great job.

  • 10 years ago

    by 888Trinity888

    This is so good, it hits home for me in some ways. I really like the end and I'm so glad you are starting to find out how to deal with this!

  • 10 years ago

    by Mezmeryz

    Hello, overall the poems a great write! i love the rhymes and volcabulary, but i think you can improve it with only a little bit of punctuation.
    i think on the third line - second stanza, 'to' should be 'too'.
    it would also be a better layout if every 3 or 4 lines or so, were split into stanzas. i want to nominate this poem for the contest, but it will encourage more comments if you just make these minor changes.
    i have to say though, the poem is got a very good flow and rhymes and i thoroughly enjoyed reading it, thanks for asking me too!
    i am sorry if it is true, hope things get better with time, i like the positive ending =]
    take care x

  • 10 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    I felt the rhymes were repetitive. For example, you used a lot of words that rhyme with, away, day, play. That sort of thing. It got annoying. I also felt the worlds could have been more advanced. For me I like to see complex or not used as frequently words. I don't even have to know what the words me. In fact it may be better that way because then I will be forced to expand my vocabulary. I just felt the poem was lack luster and the word and rhyming choice took away from the message of the poem. Interesting title though. 2 because I got lost and choice of words.

  • 10 years ago

    by kia

    I really related to this one. Funny how mental abuse is so much harmful than physical abuse. It really well written poem all the same 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Mike Wilburn

    Using my weaknesses to burn my brain
    Until it no longer functioned the same.

    Emotional poem, many feel this way often.

  • 10 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    Very very good i loved it : ) i hate when people try to play mind games on you or get joy out of watching you in pain when all you want is a relationship with them....its heartbraking : / but you did a wonderful job on the poem! 5/5 <33

  • 10 years ago

    by Nobody

    Omg this poem is amazingly good i loved it! you give each poem its own personalty and flare i love you ryhmes and word choice. the depth of pain and frustration is so real you express emotions beautifully! xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx so so so talented! 5/5