Aww dats rely gud

Good poem!!! 5/5

Great work and good title x

Kris.... this poem brought tears to my eyes. It was an extreme heart tugger. So painfully sad and true.. I know you miss him, we all do. But we'll get through it, I promise. Just keep remembering he's there watching over you. If you need to talk, he'll listen.

But this distance that's between us,
Makes things so hard to bare,
This line that we can't cross,
Keeps me here and you there.

I would have to say that's my favorite stanza of this entire poem. Not only can I relate to it because of [ him ]. But I also have a friend that died two years ago... yeah, so I also thought of him whenever I read it. Your vocabulary was amazing and the ending tied up the poem together perfectly. The flow was perfect and very smooth. The work of a true professional. I love you, keep up the amazing work doll. 5/5 <3 <3 <3 <3

~Kayla~

Kris....wow. it's so sad. i don't know who this was or what happened...but i'm sorry.

Remembering gets hard sometimes,
It hurts to make it through,
It's not easy to see and believe,
That all your words were true.

^ i really liked this stanza. remembering gets harder is such a true thing. which is hard. my grandpa died not too long ago...and remembering does get harder. *tearing up now.*

But this distance that's between us,
Makes things so hard to bare,
This line that we can't cross,
Keeps me here and you there.

^ definitely an amazing stanza...it really hurts to read it, for me..."this line that we can't cross" there's too many lines in this world....

kris, this is an amazing piece. very professional and teh flow was amazing. i forgot i was reading a poem and it wasn't just somebody hurt talking to me....great job.

5'5

Oh god...
Kris, this was just so beautiful.
I had been trying to write a poem like this for awhile, but I had never been able to do it. The words just wouldn't come.

But this, this is just amazing. I could never have written anything like this. It's just so...perfect, so gorgeous, beautiful.
He would have just loved it.

"You always said it's what you needed,
Only asked I do my best to try,
I was to strive for happiness,
Because you said there'd be no need to cry."

^This was one of my favorite stanzas, I loved all of them, but something about this one I could just really connect with. It's like you wrote exactly what I was feeling, in a way I'd never be able to write.

I'm just so speechless.
I wish I could give you a super long comment on this poem, it deserves it, but I just have no idea what to say right now.
The flow of the poem was so smooth and even, and so easy to understand, you can just feel the poem as you read it.

[geez, I really have to stop crying now]
I would give you more than a 5/5, but I can't.
So 5/5.
~Gaby

Amazing!!! i love you should check out my poems and comment

W0w that was really nicLy written n_n
i luuuved it!

Wow! Amazing poem! I wrote poems on my thing for like a few months (probably 4-5 years ago) I haven't written since, cos I realized that I didn't have a knack for it! But this is an amazing poem. It reminded me a friend of mine, actually. Take care and GOD BLESS =)

KayTay

I love this poem its very well written 5/5 :-)

Wow! I love the emotions this poems send shivers of just imagining such pain.

Wow i like this poem! i can relate to it alot! you have a great gift! keep up the great job!!!

''Rather than a distant faded memory.''

Beautiful! simply beautiful !
Well written and beautifully penned..Great Job, keep it up 5/5

Wow! I can't believe I haven't commented this poem yet. It's simply amazing. You are so talented. great job, the flow was perfect for this type of poem. keep it up! 5/5
~Forever Broken~

"The heart grows heavy,
With tears I'm holding back,
Overwhelming, they spill out,
Strength is what I lack"

^^What a beautiful opening! Oh dear lord, I really don't know what to say about this stanza, except it hits close to home, and I love the depth and emotion in these opening lines.

"Remembering gets hard sometimes,
It hurts to make it through,
It's not easy to see and believe,
That all your words were true.

You always said it's what you needed,
Only asked I do my best to try,
I was to strive for happiness,
Because you said there'd be no need to cry"

^^I think the last line would flow better with something like:
Said there'd be no need to cry.

I find these stanzas to be incredibly strong, it always hurts when you realize that someone has changed, that the words they said are no longer valued or meant and you do such a wonderful job at portraying that here.

"You promised you'd always be here,
Staying right by my side,
Convinced me our bond could never be broken,
And when I needed, your arms would open wide."

^^ I frikken adore the last line on this stanza, I find it to be one of the best lines of the piece.

"But now that things have run their course,
It feels like you're so far away,
I open my mouth to try and talk to you,
But I'm not sure what I should say"

^^ I found the flow on the last line to be of a little, maybe something like:
But I'm not sure what to say

Again, you have such a way with words, I love how you show that you're trying to communicate but you're not sure how to, again something many can relate to.

"I love you and I miss you,
With all that's in my heart,
You were always a dear friend,
I thought nothing could keep us apart."

^^ I don't think you need the "I" in the last line, it broke the flow for me. I'm not to sure on this stanza..it just seems weaker to me whereas the rest of the piece is incredibly strong.

"But this distance that's between us,
Makes things so hard to bare,
This line that we can't cross,
Keeps me here and you there"

^^ I didn't like the flow on the last line, it just didn't seem to go for me..but I'm out of ideas for this one so ignore me =D

"Everything has gotten so messed up,
And my tears refuse to be dried,
My world's been hard to keep together,
Since the night that you died.

I just wish I could see you,
To know you're here watching over me,
To make us close again like we once were,
Rather than a distant faded memory."

^^ Kris..you brought tears to my eyes..this is so sad, the melancholy and heartache in these stanzas is overwhelming and tears me up.

I adore this.