Comments : All Alone

  • 10 years ago

    by Kaila

    This poem was pretty good
    in the first stanza the flow was off a little bit
    you might want to try something like:
    I'm not going to tell a lie Vs.
    I'm not going to lie
    because then the flow is right on
    the poem itself was good
    as far as the meaning goes
    but structure was off a bit
    I think punctuation would also help
    so I give this a 4.5/5
    rounded to 5

  • 10 years ago

    by Shinobi

    This poem is a very touching story of a mother not involved in her daughters life. The choosing of words in this poem does it's best. The rhymes are great, and the structure of the piece couldn't be better. This subject is a very painful one, as I hope it's not based on a true story.
    Amazing work 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by sweet escape

    I liked the ammount of emotion and meaning you put into this poem. it is so very strong.

    i give you a 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Vanessa

    The flow was a tad bit off, but the emotion was heartfelt, and strong. The word chose was excellent and the message was clear. Touchingly sad story, hope it's not basied on real life. excellent job. 5/5
    oh yeah heres a tip that helps you spot the flow when its off, reread the poem outloud a couple of days after you read it, it helps to look at it with fresh eyes.