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This was good keep writing!
Wow that was unexcpecting. all i can really say is wow!!! great job
Awww thats so sad im sorry...and i love it..its so goin on my fav's..but i can relate..soo like yea keep up the good work..5/5
by S R P
Oh wow, this was truly amazing. I particularly liked
"One thing you should know before I let you be
Regardless of your friends, I'll always be real
You have your own eyes, so use them to see
The one thing that's most important is how you feel "
Great poem, i really loved it.
Omg,this is really wonderful...and sooo true...
You are really good...
by Chelsea King
That is one of the best poems i have ever read!! You have a really good talent that most people would take for granted, but you took it and make it into a beautiful peace of work!! Definatly a 5/5!!
by Robert Anthony
Nice! This was a really great poem, nice job, 5/5
by Shellaine shelli
This poem was like daggers stabbing the reader and keeping them captivated to read on. each word was as powerful if not more than the last. It was amazing!!!
by Michael D Nalley
This one has a nice rhythm and I can tell it is about a personal disappointment
"I can't help but to hide
Or try to make things right
I can't let go of the memories
Or grab on to those ones on your sight"
-- I gotta be honest -- this made no sense to me. The last line completely threw me off. I'm a little slow, though. rofl. :D
"With all my strength
I can't let you go
Love has its own length
I'd think you would know"
-- I think you should change "I'd" to "I" and "think" to "thought". "I thought you would know"
"I only wish you had more for me
And less for them
Because I'm the only one to see
Your inside hem"
-- I think you should even up these lines a bit. It'd look better. But that's the only negative thing I have to say.
"One thing I can do is read your heart
I can also tell whether you're hurt
Or when you need time to part"
-- I think you should add another line here. I'm not a big fan of poems that have stanza's with different number of lines.
*Overall, I thought this was good. Again, the rhyming was good, as was the flow. The emotion was strong, which is always an awesome thing in a poem
Five out of five. [5/5]