What I am (venting)

by David   Jun 28, 2008


I am black and I am evil
I am death and I am misery
I am heartache and I am a disease
I am nothing and I am everything you don't want

I am every thought you question about me
I am every curse you think about me

I am not even worthy of texting you
I am not even worthy of talking to you

I wouldn't be worthy of breathing the air you breathed out
Stealing your air, I am a thief
I am no one important
Simply nothing

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  • 8 years ago

    by Kelsey

    This poem is amazingly good. I loved it.

    Great job!

    5/5.

  • 9 years ago

    by Filledwithjoy

    Your are simply everything to people.

  • 9 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Hey Dave
    As always I enjoyed reading your poem. They are awsome.
    Sorry I'm late in commenting my net was not working.
    Keep it up

  • 9 years ago

    by BREEawNUHH

    "I am black and I am evil
    I am death and I am misery
    I am heartache and I am a disease
    I am nothing and I am everything you don't want"

    ^^ Wow. This is a really good beginning. It makes me wonder what makes you think you are these things.

    "I am every thought you question about me
    I am every curse you think about me"

    ^^ This is deep. I like the actual feeling behind the piece.

    "I am not even worthy of texting you
    I am not even worthy of talking to you"

    ^^ WOO! I love texting, hahah. Okay, seriously, now -- Like I said previously -- I like how the piece is deep. The words are very genuine, and I like that.

    "I wouldn't be worthy of breathing the air you breathed out
    Stealing your air, I am a thief
    I am no one important
    Simply nothing"

    ^^ Hm. The first line -- I'm not a fan of, personally. "I wouldn't be worthy of breathing the air you breathed out" <--- Maybe you should change this line to something like.. "I'm not worthy of breathing the air that you're breathing". Only a suggestion, of course. However, I do quite enjoy the rest of the stanza.

    Overall; I really liked this. It held a lot of emotion, I feel, and it was truthful and genuine.

    5/5

    -Briana

  • 9 years ago

    by firexdancer

    I really liked this. The poem was really good, sort of a twisted love poem, from someone who doesn't like himself.
    Really enjoyable and the flow was surprisingly smooth.
    5/5
    Gabriella