This poem is really therapeutic .......entrancing indeed..........with music in the background, would definitely take one to a higher place :
"Walk on over with your bare feet.
Slowly bend down and take a seat.
Let your toes free and enjoy the air.
Dip them in the water for a joyful affair."
This here is my favorite stanza..........for fact that feet is the one taking all the weight :)........tinkling....nice.I like this poem.....can be used for other purposes ........depending on one's understanding.
This was recommended to me and I am very glad too. Apart from the meter, which is a matter of preference, I can't fault this piece. You have created a vivid world for the reader to visualise, so while the poem unravels the reader drifts along too.
My favourite out of all the other excellent lines is this - Candle and mind become intertwined. Great image!
this poem is now my favorite!!
it was beautiful in every way.
wow..im speechless. such great emotion, a wonderful flow. a lovely piece.
kind of suspenseful in a way actually.
i loved every word. i was glued ot every word.
wonderful job well done!!
10 years ago
Excellent! Your use of language is very good and creates amazing imageries that leaves readers with a lasting impression! 5/5 without a doubt!!!!!!!
Some time I read into a poem and see things maybe unintended. Your imagery was excellent. It was kind of like reading/hearing words of a Cult Leader inticing his followers into some act of allegiance. The last stanza provided this thought
watch the waters turn slowly red
let peace through your body spread
This seemed a bit suicidal to me, just a thought. Congratulations!
Peace and Blessings
Congratulations on a well done Poem!
Awww....you are talking about my secret place! I have one, where I go to when life gets me down. It exists in my mind and you have described it to a tee:)
Thanks for sharing!
I have 30 favorites already, but I have added this poem to my favortie poems, so I can find you again:)
A work of excellence. some great imagery, incredibly descriptive with a wounderful message. this really makes the reader feel good. keep it up =D
10 years ago
by The Prince
I've noticed this on the front page for a while now, and have never actually read it. Now I've taken the time to, I can see why it did. Such captivating beauty is present in this poem and the title alone captures the essence of the poem, itself. It reminds me of..Wordsworth's poems about nature, and it's boundaries. Brilliant :)
If you have any time at all, could you have a look at the poem 'Spring' I wrote about nature?