I love it keep going !!

Ok. So the emotion in this was very good, hon. *nods* It's sweet and sentimental. and i'm sure she really likes it. soooo i'm gonna go all technical on you. :P here we go:

You and me together forever we'll always
be.

^^ this line needs to be spread out, as does the whole poem. Think of the beat. Tap out the syllabls, that kind of thing, so that you can spread it out. otherwise, it looks like one big paragraph. also...punctuation. commas, girl!

you can use my shoulder to cry on. You can use my bed to lay on.

^^ so i liked the purpose of these two lines, but what i'd like to see is word variation. like... "You can always cry on my shoulder; my bed is yours to use." something like that. just so that it doesn't sound overly repetitive.

and you use me to hug.Because i will always be there for you like you have been there for me.
I LOVE YOU KRISTEN!!!

^^ Again, very very sweet. Punctuation would be good..

so.....this is a good beginning. *nods* definitely work on your technicality a bit. but the emotions are there, and that's what makes a poem a poem. 3/5

Thank you!
your a lot of help! :)

Love it. keep it up. this shows ur a true friend=)

Aww thats really sweet!! 5/5