:/ i didn't really find it that great to be dead honest...I mean I liked the wording and so but other wise, I think you really wrecked it by not making it a longer poem..it would be a lot better, really good if you created something out of that small fraze..
Clever. Short, blunt and to the point. A powerful piece here. Excellent job. It grabs the reader and tugs on the heartstrings. I love how the rhyming is not forced, yet the last word of each line rhymes. ~~Claps~~
That was very good. Very rhythmic. I liked the subtle beat it had to it when I said it out loud.
The message was very cryptic. (I hear that's a good thing though.) I didn't exactly understand where it was going, and the only way I understood it at the end was because of my family situation. The poem was really good and kind of showed me the other side of the cases I fight in.
A very good poem, it's strength is in its brevity. Poems are like sermons they don't need to be long to communicate the message or the emotions. The last line got me in the heart. So sad from such promise. We need to be careful where we plant our seeds. Thank you.