LuanneVery sad and haunting piece you have penned.

Ancient moments fuse the mind
shadows hold upon waters deep
heart recalls haunted times
when memories betrayed sleep

Those old memories just seem to keep haunting us no matter how much we think we have moved past them. Giving the feeling of drowning. Keeping us from much needed sleep.

Sands shifted , silence screamed
smothering once promised dreams
illusions of happiness portrayed
nothing is, to what it seems

Putting on the face of happiness when inside you are still screaming. Where did the promises made go? The ones that always made you feel safe and secure. Will they ever be found again.

Naked in the arms of misery
love engraved paper nor stone
lies revealing a putrid stench
as trust led to paths unknown

The pain is unbarable when you feel like all you have believed in is no longer there. All the lies coming from the one you trusted most. Taken to a place you never wanted to be.

Desolate soul grips reality
courage ignited from a spark
closing doors of foregone days
unleashing shackled scars of dark

The final realization that you have to pull things together to be able to move forward. Finding that one little spark still left to build on. You have to shut the door on those times if you want to build up this love again. Leaving them chained in the dark.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Excellent comment with detailed opinion of each stanza. The reader felt the meaning behind the piece as her comments showed.

Very worthy of praise

An excellent write Luanne,Sometimes it takes a lot of courage to open up your heart and lay it out there for all to see. The true mark of a poet.Allowing the reader to feel our pain,facing the vulnerability. My hats off to you ,excellent rhymes and flow. great job!

Desolate soul grips reality
courage ignited from a spark
closing doors of foregone days
unleashing shackled scars of dark
This stanza is fantastic. A ray of hope at last! Very well constructed lines.
Through out the poem lines are very strong. Like... 'Naked in the arms of misery...' Brilliant. Fabulous work!

What a cleverly written, thought provoking piece. Excellent word choice, rhythm and flow. I love that you have not used forced rhyming and this poem is deep and meaningful!

Hey Luanne, nice to read some of your poems again...

Luanne, this piece is awesome. It's funny because I went off the club poems page, just read Frank's "So deep in love" poem feeling good and happy. You took me from my happy place into this desolate feeling of darkness. Not exactly a good thing, but way to use such powerful emotions to key me in.

Ancient moments fuse the mind
shadows hold upon waters deep
heart recalls haunted times
when memories betrayed sleep

What a nice, nice stanza. The last line is phenomenal. It flows so well.

Great write! Thanks for sharing!