Comments : A Beautiful Day

  • 10 years ago

    by Nee

    I loved this piece =]]
    I was doing a random reading and I came across yours..
    inspiring title.
    I loved the fact that the poem is filled with optimism, makes the reader smile =)

    Keep it up xxx

  • 10 years ago

    by ether

    Again, you rhymed rain and pain.

    In the second stanza subway is too big of a word, why not change it to bus?
    I don't understand why today is part of your fate, it's a dramatic line which isn't followed up anywhere in the poem.

    The depression part of this poem lets it down a bit, too.


    Now to the good things;
    I loved loved loved the idea of this poem, you created great images which I adore and it's a beautiful day here at the moment, which makes it that much more relevant.
    You did a great job of making such a beautiful day =]

    jess ~

  • 10 years ago

    by ALEX

    I absolutely love the optimism in this.
    Also, the contrast was very nice, especially when you show all these things that aren't good, but it's still a "beautiful day to be alive."

    I'm adding this one to my favourites. :)