Comments : Don't waste your pity on me

  • 5 years ago

    by Kate

    I loved this one as well. I think you have a very strong start for this poem. It has a strong voice and speaks clearly to the point you're trying to get across (or at least the one I am getting from it).
    It seems as if you are telling them that yes you may be broken but you are still fighting. You don't want their pity, letting people in will only cause more pain and a harder fall. I enjoy a message like this because it is one I attempt to get across myself to people I am surrounded by.
    I like the entire thing really. Strong statements and ideas and you clearly express that in these stanzas.
    Great job :)