Comments : Desperation

  • 8 years ago

    by X Harlea X

    Wow.powerful piece.this was again like the others, very descriptive and well written. you can feel the pain in this and see the images beyond the pain. great job. ((5))
    harlea

  • 8 years ago

    by Courtney Hough

    Words Etched into my soul, leaving scars as they bleed Crimson
    Though I try and cry out desperately, but no ones there to listen

    is my fav part 5/5 i know how that is

  • 8 years ago

    by Teria

    "If I should come back, will I be able to see what is is you see"
    [If I should come back, will I be able to see what IT is you see]

    "Maybe then angels would cry, and maybe then.... i wont want to die"
    [Maybe then angels would cry, maybe then I WOULDN'T want to die]

    I'm not sure who 'you' is referring to in this poem. And exactly what it is you want to see. But life is a good thing, even through the trials we go through and ill-thought choices we make. I'm sure you realize that though. I'll pray for you, darling. To stay safe and sane.