I picked this for a contest because I found it difficult, but imagined you could get some really interesting pieces out of it. You did an excellent job with this, You had me from the start, your first 5 lines, just wonderful. Thanks so much for entering and congrats.
I was actually thinking about writing one of these for the contest, although i'm not sure if I have the patience. I believe anyone who writes a poem like this is very clever and clever you definitly are. To me each word here was well placed. The simple and the complex they all entwined together to create a poem which is filled with a strong message behind it.
I honestly really love those two lines. Simple wording, yes. but you explained so much in two basic words. Really expressive words. This was an absolutely wonderfully written life poem and I'm not sure that I can say much more to you then that.
Overall I enjoyed reading this cleverly thoughtout pieces. Well done. -Mel