Comments : FireFly

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    "The afflicted torn from the passion of life,
    Are often found soiled on a divergent path,
    But the enthusiast treks in wide-open fields of possibility."

    Though I love the whole piece, this was my favorite part. You have done some marvelous work here, it was a joy to read, I am glad I found it, you have a lovely way with words. Your word choice was nice and it all flowed smoothly. Well done.

  • 9 years ago

    by Sourav

    Didn't find it very free flowing. Second line is too long. Overall it's good but the structure of the poem could have been better.

  • 9 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Yu op don't think I get but I do you are nobody until somdeboby wants you then evreyone does