Excellent song, I could seriously see this a famous piece! I loved the wording and the truth of it all, there was just so much meaning, it left me breathless. Well-expressed thoughts and emotions, a enjoyable read from start to finish. 5/5 from me, take care. Keep writing, always and forever.......
When your sorrows start to haunt you
And all you can feel is doubt
Feel me out in the haze
I can be your one way out.
Try and get rid of the repetition of out in the last two lines .
But other than that , honestly , that was awesome :) . I would love to hear Hedley or FaberDrive sing that , I really would . Fantastic rhyming and pretty much flawless flow . Keep writting lyrics .. You really deserve credit for them , and maybe one day you'll get it :) . 5/5
Wow. Thats all I have to say. Theres a few parts that are iffy to me, but I think when you're writing a song that it's different than poetry. So, overall it's an amazing piece. But, the piece itself is great. It seems to flow well and I could feel the rhythm/beat. Which always makes out for a great song!