Comments : Fourth of July ( Senryu)

  • 9 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy


    although this is not a celebration in the U.K I can feel the mixed emotion and charged atmoshere in this piece. All this imagery and all in just 17 syllables, how do you do it?

    (((hugs))) xx

  • 9 years ago

    by Sylvia

    To me the 4th of July means the summer is almost over, we are at the halfway point of the year. I am not much on the sounds of fireworks but the beauty of the displays they use is wonderful. Good Job. 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Beautiful piece, you really summed up everything in such few words! The imagery that passed my mind was incredible, as the Fourth of July is a joyous time. 5/5 from me, take care...


  • 9 years ago

    by Cara

    Im going to sound so.. dumb, but whats 4th of July? :] *thinks about holidays..* halloween is in October i think.. so its not Halloween.. haha. Is it thanksgiving? hmm.. i feel sooo dumb right now haha.
    Regardless of what it is about, you wrote it very well. :]

  • 9 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    A great Senryu .. I am quite impressed to see all these forms being wrote by you. Each one I read is completely different.. its nice to see you expanding your horizons and exploring forms of poetry. A poem about the 4th of July.. in such few words youve said it all. I love the usage of the word waves.. I believe that would be almost a personification.

    Well done.