Comments : Divine Copyright

  • 9 years ago

    by Chelsey

    I really like this poem, i read it through twice and it was just amazing.
    I couldn't possibly pick a favorite line or even a favorite stanza really. i thought the whole thing was equally amazing.

    i'd definitely rate it a five.
    i truly look forward to reading some more of your poems.
    good work(:

  • 9 years ago

    by Civil Hatori

    This poem, I can honestly say, has the most powerful phrases in it that I have read in a long time. It was as if I could spend an hour hanging on each sentence if my eyes had not been so greedy as to see the next line. I particularly like the last stanza. However, the lines that stole my attention the most are these:

    "Words to dispel darkness words meant to inspire
    Warm words to heal the passion of a pointless fire

    Many desires and appetites have left us so cold
    Thank God for the gift of wisdom, as we grow old"

    There is so much truth in them. I see no needed improvements in your art, and you have a well deserved 5/5 =]

    --Hari

  • 9 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Very beautifully written and worded. The structure and flow was excellent. I really enjoyed this piece. You have a natural talent for writting, keep up the fantastic work and I shall keep reading.

    Peace, Joe

  • 9 years ago

    by Rolo

    From this piece, I was able to take away an incredible sense of faith and hope. Giving credit to a higher power and exposing our weakness as humans was a very nice theme to play upon.
    I really enjoyed your word choice, as it made the overall meaning more powerful.

    I had to read this slowly in order for each line to read smoothly...though I actually think that helped your message come through. It's a very nice write 5/5. And I thank you for your comment :]

    -Rolo

  • 9 years ago

    by Christina Gomes

    "Many desires and appetites have left us so cold
    Thank God for the gift of wisdom, as we grow old
    We're made in His image and likeness we are told
    Yet our human weaknesses sometimes are bold"

    This is my favorite stanza. The first line, in my opinion or at least the way I took it, really reflects man's unending desire to want more and more. Sometimes it's as if, everything will never be enough. I believe satisfaction does come from religion for many people, at least when they themselves can let faith be enough.

    I enjoyed reading this, it was interesting to read especially when I feel in my generation many people have lost faith in organized religion.

  • 9 years ago

    by umbra

    You did a great job with this poem! The content was very uplifting and shows that faith the size of a pebble can shake mountains apart. The flow was nice and sedate and the rhyme scheme much better than I could do! Bravo! 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by kate

    I really liked this poem a lot, you did an amazing job. I think the concept of this is no matter if we fall or begin once again there will be always that one person that one thing [god] to help us rise and become one with ourself again. like being depressed we can always look for him for a little advice or help, maybe a talk because sometimes our best friends or other friends can be our worst critic's in life itself. =] I hope im kinda right on this but that's what I got out of this poem and it is true.

    keep it up.
    keep on writing.
    love always and forever.

    ps: I'm glad my poem helped you and realize somethings.

  • 9 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    I like how the piece conveys hope and faith. Good flow and rhythm and is void of forced rhyming. Nicely done.

  • 9 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    This was truly beautiful. You convey a sense of faith and hope in the world so well. Your rhyming is perfect, too. I honestly just don't have much to say; it was brilliant.

  • 9 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    This piece just didn't grab me. It was very insightful, but it at times, it felt to me as if the flow was broken, which for me made it difficult on what was being said.

    Brad

  • 9 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Thanks

  • Good work its nice to read poems that are good keep up the work your doing good

  • 9 years ago

    by Lu

    Created in the image and likeness of the divine
    Some words pass through me as if they were mine
    Words to dispel darkness words meant to inspire
    Warm words to heal the passion of a pointless fire
    ^^^
    I love the direction you are heading in this piece but I found it to have to many "words"
    They seems to fit perfectly in the 3rd line and removing them may cause a loss of power that the poems holds. Not sure how it could be re-worded but the repetition does draw attention away from the powerful effect the poem could have.

    Some words pass through me as if they were mine
    ^^^
    I do love this line though ... and the feeling it gives me

    For many have proudly fallen, but the humble shall rise
    With the acceptance of the Lord's grace that opens our eyes
    When all looks to be lost and relief seems hidden from our sight
    The Spirit within the willing triumphs with a Divine copyright
    ^^^
    I love this ending and couldn't think of a better way to end this gem.

    It is overall a wonderful read and therefore would love to see it upon the front pages and am therefore going to nominate it.

    Thanks for sharing
    Luanne

  • 9 years ago

    by You Kill Me

    If the truth is to be known we all must confess
    That we all fall short of the faith and love we profess

    This is my favorite line. It was put together so well, and is full with meaning and power.

    I loved it so much.
    Very good.

  • 8 years ago

    by Randy East

    Another one I really like of yours. NICE!!

  • 6 years ago

    by Randy East

    I ask God for knowledge and wisdom, every time I pray. Wisdom is a beautiful think I look forward to as I age

    wonderful poem.

    Randy