Comments : Awash

  • 8 years ago

    by Corinne

    :-(

    I love "down by the puddle of rue"

    Wonderful and sad, Melissa.

  • 8 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    You sure have a way to bring out the emotions as well as draw a lasting image for
    the reader with your words. Sad yet penned with grace..take care.

  • 8 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    Wow, I have become suddenly enthralled in your writes.

    The depression this speaks of is immense. The love that is so hard to get over. Amazing Job.

  • 8 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Thought provoking and sadly penned. What an excellent ending. I loved your word choice here. Articulate and clever. Wonderful job!

  • 8 years ago

    by Lu

    Melissa you have such a powerful way with words. You make the reader feel each and every line as though it were their very own heart feeling the pain.

    Such a sad write that many, many people can relate to.

    A wonderfully touching read

    Luanne

  • 8 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Awesome write ... the ending stanza left me speechless ... its so powerful ... loved the personification of love...

    "but nothing about why
    love left me here

    to sink "

    ^^ brilliant ending ... the last line itself expressed all the emotions ...

  • 8 years ago

    by Aureus Argentum

    This is really beautiful, Melissa. :) I loved how you formed it. :)

    Congratulations on the win.

    5/5

    Bri~

  • 8 years ago

    by Lu

    Congrats Melissa, well deserved win !

  • 8 years ago

    by Nicko

    A lovely piece well worth the read, wonderfully constructed with clever word usage. I've read a lot of poems that have won on the front page, yours is more deserving than most. I disagree with The Tasteless regarding your over emphasis of the word "love" in the second line, to me it gives focus to your piece and draws the reader in to the atmosphere and the poems intent. Well done

    Nick

  • 8 years ago

    by Knee

    A definite-deserved-winning poem !

    blustering downpours
    flooded my chest
    with stormy water

    This part was very intelligently written, truly loved the imagination put here.

    The last part made me go like wow..this poem is such a great inspiration at the end.
    Very well done Mel
    Write on !