Wow....a strong reflection of pain can be observed. . .you've raised the bar to the next level...idk what to say ..im speechless beyond this......

keep up the good work ^^,

peace~

This peice of work is remarkable. I can feel all the pain driven down inside ur write. Its very visual as well. Great job and keep up the good work.

The flawless flow made this a beautiful read in spite of the sad theme. This well written poem deeply touched my heart.
5>>>>>>>>>>>>

The world is sucking her in
She doesn't know where to begin.
She feels so hollow.
She doesn't know if she exists.

to me this part is very powerful
i can relate to it.
this poem has so much emotion and passion.
Definitely a 5/5

-->Jess<--

The flow in this poem was shaky, choppy words that insome places didn't seem to entirely fit. I found that you were focusing on making it more so rhyme than the emotion and overall flow of the poem.

Though I do like how your poem had a mix of cliche's and then their own healthy mix of words and creativity.