Comments : Broken and Lost

  • 8 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    There's nothing to lament
    With dry eyes that cannot weep
    They stay forever open
    Whilst others' eyes fall to sleep

    *I LOVE!!! this stanza. It's perfect. Omg I loved how you wrote this. I haven't written a rhyming poem in a long time and this one makes me want to start again. This was such a sad and emotional piece hun. I can really feel your sadness and how alone you feel in every word and that it truly a talent. I love the simple rhyme and the flow was amazing. I can really relate to what you're saying. Great work dear :) Nik *

  • 8 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poem stirred a lot of emotion in me and I loved the style, word chioce, and metaphors

    Well done

  • 8 years ago

    by Trinity Lee

    Really well written
    Fantastic as Always.

    KIU

  • 8 years ago

    by Roxy

    Wow that is very deep and such a meaningful poem. I've not been on this site for a while now and this is the first poem I've read for a long long time! My favorite stanza is:

    There's nothing to lament
    With dry eyes that cannot weep
    They stay forever open
    Whilst others' eyes fall to sleep

    It made sense to me and I dont know it's very dark and filled with emotions but my favorite line is one in stanza 3 about the stiches that make you smile. It creats such a good image to the reader!!
    Well done.
    x