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by Allanah Asphyxia
Very Good Poem, I Can Relate,(:
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Wow.. short but to the point! very strong worded. i love it...like the way the poem goes good to bad in this manner.. it shows deep emotion. 5/5
by David Marshall
Hmm i remember the days i felt like that...
life gets better, but pain and sorrow never go away,
You just tend to deal with it better through out the years.
by Augustus Black
Short but written very nicely. I guess you are explaining the pain that really troubles you a lot.
You have used the sentence:
My pain has returned
That means the poet had suffered from the same pain earlier also. That would had been a very terrible pain. So the poet knows that it's better to die peacefully then to live with that pain again.
Rightly understandable, yes, at certain cases people lose their desire to live.
In my view, this poem should had been written in two stanzas.
Overall Well Done!! Keep on writing. 5/5.