Love how smooth the flow of this piece was. Very intense emotions throughout. Great job :] Nik

Sounds like there is somebody who is able to tear you apart just like that. This is an intense read with sadness in every line..touching read.

Anthony
Very deep and intense feelings are portrayed in this piece.

I have become my own prisoner
yet I hold the key to my freedom,
but still I give her the power
to use me, control me, slowly kill me.

It is so sad when we love someone so much we allow this to happen to ourselves.
Great job!

A sentiment written about countless times but you didn't use the already done a million time cliches. I liked your word choice and unique way of expressing yourself.....literally, metaphorically.....either way, you did a nice job.

Absolutely brilliant

Dark write...
I have become my own prisoner
yet I hold the key to my freedom,
but still I give her the power
to use me, control me, slowly kill me.
^^ loved this para... willingly or unwillingly sometimes we become the prisoner of our mind...
well written...

We are powerless at times to stop giving our love the power to control us and our feelings. We keep going back for more, thinking it will be love this time, only it more pain and suffering. Some lessons we never learn.

I loved this. Usually I write much more loosely so I don't tend to go for structured poems but this one is exceptional. A story well told. great work! :)

--Viola

Thanks for the great comments and the votes. This has been my foray into a more free verse type of poetry and I'm really rather pleasantly surprised that enough people liked it as to even have it nominated, let alone win.

I get the most satisfaction from the readers that understand my poems and leave comments. This make me feel as though my writing is better than I really think it is; you guys always give me a higher grade than I give myself :)