Comments : Temptation

  • 7 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Love how smooth the flow of this piece was. Very intense emotions throughout. Great job :] Nik

  • 7 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Sounds like there is somebody who is able to tear you apart just like that. This is an intense read with sadness in every line..touching read.

  • 7 years ago

    by Cindy

    Anthony
    Very deep and intense feelings are portrayed in this piece.

    I have become my own prisoner
    yet I hold the key to my freedom,
    but still I give her the power
    to use me, control me, slowly kill me.

    It is so sad when we love someone so much we allow this to happen to ourselves.
    Great job!

  • 7 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    A sentiment written about countless times but you didn't use the already done a million time cliches. I liked your word choice and unique way of expressing yourself.....literally, metaphorically.....either way, you did a nice job.

  • 7 years ago

    by ben

    Absolutely brilliant

  • 7 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Dark write...
    I have become my own prisoner
    yet I hold the key to my freedom,
    but still I give her the power
    to use me, control me, slowly kill me.
    ^^ loved this para... willingly or unwillingly sometimes we become the prisoner of our mind...
    well written...

  • 7 years ago

    by Sylvia

    We are powerless at times to stop giving our love the power to control us and our feelings. We keep going back for more, thinking it will be love this time, only it more pain and suffering. Some lessons we never learn.

  • 7 years ago

    by Viola

    I loved this. Usually I write much more loosely so I don't tend to go for structured poems but this one is exceptional. A story well told. great work! :)

    --Viola

  • 7 years ago

    by Anthony M

    Thanks for the great comments and the votes. This has been my foray into a more free verse type of poetry and I'm really rather pleasantly surprised that enough people liked it as to even have it nominated, let alone win.

    I get the most satisfaction from the readers that understand my poems and leave comments. This make me feel as though my writing is better than I really think it is; you guys always give me a higher grade than I give myself :)