Comments : Rise, Rise Oh Sun

  • 7 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    I just felt sun rays around me..and due to the repetition of that line ..almost saw the sun really rising

    I just the images u revealed and how the sun raise would make us feel..
    a lovely writing by you

    5/5
    just loooveddd ur ending lines
    the most

  • 7 years ago

    by White Orchid

    I loved this poem!! I could literally picture every scene you described in it. I think my fav. line was about the landscape and the Vincent Van Gogh part. I thoroughly enjoyed the whole thing!!! Really gave me a great feeling inside, which I liked. Great write from you once again. :) 5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Well done on this inspiring write.

    I like the idea that the sun is looking out for us, drying tears and breathing new life into those that need it.

    Well done

    Michael

  • 6 years ago

    by Colm

    This had a musical quality about it, like somebody was singing a melody of 'rise, rise oh sun,' in the background. This was both good and bad for me; reading it as a poem it gets very repetitive, and as a result predictable and more simplistic than it should have been. Other than that there were a few nice little images in it

  • 6 years ago

    by Kips

    Now this is one of the well arranged poem I've read in a while. I'll add it to my fav. poems....5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Steven Beesley

    A nice piece to greet a new day and bringing new life.

  • 4 years ago

    by Abbie

    I really like this, it sounds like a song.

  • 4 years ago

    by ThebutterfliesMuse

    This one is so beautiful. I love using the sun because it
    is so beautiful and easy to write about. I love the title used in this poem because it flows so well in here.

    The first stanza is so simplistic yet so well written because you start out the day with it and the night can be a bad thing. I loved how you use the night as a dark and scary monster per say and the morning as an angel and the sun is the guiding light. Perfect.

    Second- I love the continued lines fron the morning to the day. Like you hope its going to be a great day because of the sun. Again I love the sun as your happiness and warmth in this. The sun really is a warm star making anyone who wants it!.

    Third- This one made me smile. The imagery is great here because the rains tears is a great line for the dark and feeling alone and the rainbow a symbol for hope and peace. You are saying please help me wipe away the tears I cried and help me follow the right path!.

    Fourth- in all your poems I've read your metaphor are great and this one is no different. The sun can truly make someone happy as a close friend to all. Using the sun as a friend is perfect because a true friend is always there for you no matter what.

    Ending- Life truly is beautiful and this end is perfect you feel safe overall. I love how you went from having a bad night to feeling happy and safe once again.

    I love the flow and rhyming as usual you did a great job and I see no flaws. I loved it. 5