Comments : Pyre

  • 7 years ago

    by sibyllene

    Oh, for sure morbid. To be honest, that is how I'd prefer to go, but you don't see Viking funerals being condoned very often in these parts.

    I agree with your thoughts on the fifth stanza. I was unsatisfied with them as well, and have dome some shifting around that's more to my liking. Thanks for the input!

  • 7 years ago

    by abracadabra

    I think you're a Hindu at heart.

  • 7 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Wow this is definitely the last thing you expect to read under this category. I liked it though, the way I interpreted it as when it's you're time to go, you want your ashes spread everywhere, so that everyone has you in their life is some way, whether it be in the most unusual of ways. I thought this was definitely an excellent write - makes the reader think of what you are saying & the point you're trying to get across. Definitely a very strong poem with the poet's voice throughout the entire poem, embedded into each word. This poem really made me think & is nothing but a gem. I couldn't really pick out anything straight away the I thought could be improved...well done!

  • 7 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    Yes! Yes! Yes!

    Me, Too...................................
    Bravo.

  • 7 years ago

    by silvershoes

    I love this poem. I love all of your poems.

    "I would rather be ashes than dust! I would rather that my spark should burn out in a brilliant blaze than it should be stifled by dry-rot. I would rather be a superb meteor, every atom of me in magnificent glow, than a sleepy and permanent planet. The function of man is to live, not to exist. I shall not waste my days trying to prolong them. I shall use my time." - Jack London

  • 7 years ago

    by sibyllene

    Nice!

  • 7 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Lol, this is quite the statement!

    I agree on all you say, it is a splendid way to leave your mark on all you left behind:)

    I want my life in every life, and
    [for] my soul to rise like fireworks for
    the breathing hordes to watch, as
    I make my way towards the sun.

    ^^
    A little less "I"and still the same impact.

    Beautiful work:)

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 5 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    Nah man,you got me hooked on everything..

    friendship,life,tidals..you rock them all kid
    it ain't even fair.