Comments : Our Ballad

  • 6 years ago

    by Britt

    I'm glad this got nominated, because I am out of votes and I absolutely love this.

    I love your rhyming poems, there is nothing better to me. I think this one struck me in such a beautiful way, with a twinge of sadness, strength, and hope.

    I adore your rhyme scheme and how it wasn't the typical abab, it left something to the readers to look forward to in the next line, wondering when it would all slowly mesh together.

    That ending is one of the best endings I've read in a long time. I love your love poetry. Gorgeous stuff, m'love!

  • 6 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    "On we trudge into the storm, side by side,
    terrified,
    but sharing in a youthful pride,
    steps forming a steady pace,
    and our hearts taking hold of a reckless grace."

    Beautiful poetic words to describe the courage to withstand the turmoil and complexities (storm) lovers have to withstand when in in love.

    "Soon swirls of wind-song come flurrying,
    whisking our sun-kissed cheeks,
    worrying,
    jaws clenched, hands in an iron clasp,
    we can hardly see, but we keep our grasp.
    As long as your fingers are strewn within mine,
    I have reason to believe we
    will come out fine. "

    Optimism not to be undone for all in love who have a will to weather the storm that wants to bring the love down. Amazing expressions. Only the first 2 lines of the paragraph above "soon swirls..." is somewhat difficult to comprehend or match with the remaining in this para. Perhaps it needs a little clarity of words or maybe an explanation to this naive reader. I love your poetic expressions (when i can get the meaning..Ha ha!)

  • 6 years ago

    by Lauren

    This is really good :]

  • 6 years ago

    by rachael

    When a piece is so good, as incredibly hopeful, fanciful, and painful as yours; when it's just that good that there is nothing to say 'cept "Wow," then, as the reader, that's precisely the right thing to say before words ruin the sentiment.

    Wow.

  • 6 years ago

    by yogi73

    Very moving

  • 6 years ago

    by innocent chalera

    This is nice.am interested with your art and lay out.,you used the rights words so its just perfect.

    *claps hands*