Girly, girly, girly! well, what do we have here? a new dark poem? you know what...ask Temps, I was telling her today that I feel like writing a dark poem because I haven't ever tried to write one before, so, I can consider this as an inspiration! :P you penned here a masterpiece that is full of emotions and darkness, sure, ma it is dark:P

I have few suggestions, young lady:

1- do not capitalize the first letter in each line.
2- there are some commas needed, the punctuartion wasn't well-done, so in my opinion, edit this ;)

Sneaking behind closed doors
Anticipating for my return
You stand there in the dark
Waiting for a moment to earn

^^^
you were talking in the continued present, right? then you put the subjet and used the simple present tense, and this is a mistake:) hon, correct it.

You hear a sound coming your way
So you prepare for your next strike
Every move I make you know about
As if you can predict me like a psych
^^^^
I love this...:) good job, girl!

I'm walking down the hallway
^^^
for my part, a little bit cliche.

My fear is like the fragrance
That attracts a predator to its prey
So it triggers the animal in you
That hunts me back day after day
^^^^

oMGGGGGGG
i have to say...this is fabuloussssss
very well-written, my favorite stanzaaaa for sure
!!!!!!
nominated, lovely! :):)
bravooo

You torture me in various ways
Helplessly I struggle for a chance
To take once again a deep breath
Before you start your last dance
^^^^
a comma after "Helplessly" would help.

I now became an evidence
Lying lifeless in your arms
Still wearing all the bruises
I collected from your crimes
^^^^^^
I don't think "arms" and "crimes" are original rhymes, they don't even rhyme...:/
anyways, I loved this piece, good write. ;) keep writing and take care..

Darn this hot got to be a winner in any book
wow it's good

My fear is like the fragrance
That attracts a predator to its prey
So it triggers the animal in you
That hunts me back day after day

i'm dazzled, speachless
5/5s

Over all you have a really good poem here. I was pulled in from the first lined and my interest was held all the way until the end.

I think the poem as a whole is really good but for me the following stanza stood out

"I'm walking down the hallway
Headed toward the destiny I own
Just about to open the door
That would lead to the unknown"

excellent

5/5

Well meme ..........what can i say.........epic.......amazing........fabulous........none of it seems to fit. that is truely fantastic i was reading it and didn't want it to end! Just perfect :) x

My fear is like the fragrance
That attracts a predator to its prey
So it triggers the animal in you
That hunts me back day after day
~ I love this.
great job..

A kind of a dark poetry.. written very well. the pain and the words speaks in it..

my favorite stanza...

You easily can read my thoughts
The moment I entered the room
So from the place you last stopped
Now you're preparing to resume.

you are a great writer. and its good to know you are improving your writing day bye day.. i love your poetry.. well done..

keep it up 5/5

Nothing much lft to say..5/5

Wow, you wrote this very well :)
this poem really got my attention, and you tied everything together quite nice.
great job!! ill be reading and voting for more of your poems :)

Wow, this poem is amazing! I can't believe I didn't read it sooner - I love the title, and the depth of the whole poem. The last three stanzas really affected me and you really hit the reader with your words. I love it! Well done!

I thought this was amazing i loved the last stanza
I now became an evidence
Lying lifeless in your arms
Still wearing all the bruises
I collected from your crimes

the way you wrote this was unbelievable really well thought out poem amazing girl x

Wow. this poem is very precise I could see a glimps of what you feel. good job.