Comments : Foxy

  • 12 years ago

    by Saerelune

    First of all, I like your humorous (almost like that of a kid) tone in this piece. Along with the perfect rhymes it makes this so much easier to read. I really like the way you crept into the skin of the fox, but also kept some human traits. The fur, the hunting and the surroundings really make the reader aware that it's an animal you're talking about. But then you talk about the way you get flirty and you describe your paws as "little black sleeves", which truly reminds me of human again. It's a very playful poem you've written down here and I truly enjoyed that. I especially liked the ending, such cosiness. And I had to laugh out loud when I read "foxy" because I know you're talking about you being a fox, but foxy also means sexy, and I found that very suitable. :) Well done, I'm glad that you got inspired.

  • 12 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Heehe :D I think I know the inspiration

    I loved it great flow and vivid as the can see the foxes meeting :) a lovely peice and wonderful poem a delightful read 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    I smiled all the way through this delightful poem. it's sweet, cute , warm and fuzzy. This was such a great poem.

    Connie xx

  • 12 years ago

    by The Queen

    EJ, well bloody done on this challenge, never knew you could write something like this :)

    It's flawless and umm an uber cute love story =p

    Keep it up, man!

  • 12 years ago

    by L


    Ah, foxy.
    haha, this is super clever and funny. A story of how someone met his foxy and how happy they are with their family.

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Lol hahha.. I think tat was a cute poem, with a really lovely ending and personifications.

    EXCELLENT>

  • 12 years ago

    by Heavy

    Ha ha! This has to be one of the cuter poems I've read on this site!!! I love it! It's playful and you displayed the imagery so well! I love Foxes, they're one of my favorite animals! Cute, aren't they? :3 Anyways, Nice write!!! I enjoyed this, gave me a smile - so thanks for that and thanks for sharing :)

    5/5