Comments : Ordinary

  • 6 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Will try this again, lol. Friendships like this are to cherished, they are few and far between. This friend should be honored by your words.

  • 6 years ago

    by Hallucinostic

    Im pretty sure, indubitably, no doubt that your friend, and friends feel the exact same way as you do. You are a very good friend Connie, and being your friend is a treasure... Ehh, about the poem lol, once again youve created something beautiful here, like golden words or rainbows or stuff like that lol. Every reader will feel good just by reading this, and that also applies to all your poems. Great, as always. :D

  • 6 years ago

    by Captain Lonesome

    Beautiful!! This is an excellent expression of emotion and trust! I'm sure that the person this was written for feels an electricity sparking deep within and churning in their heart in ways not felt for quite some time!! Friendships with such mutual feelings of comfort, compassion, and security are gifts be treasured!! :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Decayed

    Connie, great descriptive details. They kind of give volume to the write. And personifying the tree got me going.. As if it's a life cycle with the changes of the seasons.

    Great job.

  • 6 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    I forgot about you losing this poem and having to re-post.
    I love the metaphor of the tree in comparison to friendship. You've done a great job in letting that special someone know how much they mean to you.

  • 6 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    Ordinary!...this is an understatement of the year, Connie. This poem is anything but Ordinary!
    You have given a new meaning to friendship. A new life, a new level in your simple and humbly penned words.

    From my window a tree
    looms high above the roof,
    reaching majestically to
    the sky.

    The tall tree is symbolic of your friendship, with each passing month it just grows taller, and sky is the limit.

    Its leaves: ordinary yellow
    patterned with the brown edges
    of dying fall as winter
    marches forth.
    Ordinary:

    The foliage of fall is beautiful, even as it wilts away...the golden, red-yellow coloration to this friendship before it "falls" is not a "fall" at all, as you so aptly project here, just a prelude to renewal after the winter (or next morning) as so nicely said here:

    Till the breaking of dawn
    when the sun kisses each tenderly
    bathing them in a heavenly
    glow. Transforming, morphing
    showering blessings.

    Yes the friendship renews after each "fall" because there is always spring after the winter, and with it rebirth, of even a stronger foliage (bonds of friendship).

    My thoughts, my emotions
    are as this tree. You transform
    my life , shining on me with
    happiness and joy. Of grace
    and trust.

    And it is in your trust and friendship that you place. that this tree grows stronger and taller, for if there was no love to nurture it, it would have already taken a "fall". So just like sunlight, it will illuminate you, give happiness and joy, for without happiness in our life we have no hope, and without hope we have little joy to look forth to. So beautiful are your penned words.

    The warmth of friendship
    rains down on me. Quenching
    my thirst, drowning loneliness.
    Sprouting the spring of tenderness
    and rebirth of complacence

    We all need this special friend(ship), sometimes greater than any love, to nurture and give us hope in life, when we are down, for without hope and friendship, we will be all alone. I think the last word should be self-confidence, not complacence (egotism, swagger, arrogance)...but we do get the real meaning here!

    Humbling, lovely and heartfelt are your words here, for your friend. xoxo

  • 6 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    Pure connie beautifully written x:-)

  • 6 years ago

    by NightFlyer

    I really feel the preciousness of friendship now that I'm seperate from my best friend by many miles. So your analogy in your poem of a tree glowing with the rays of the sunrise is perfect. You paint a beautiful image here.

  • 6 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow, Connie this poem is so beautiful! It a sweet poem that is like a breath of fresh air. I loved it from start to beginning. I really like how you compared friendship to nature in this way.. it was so lovely to read! The beginning and ending were all perfect and the poem flowed really well.

    This is my favorite stanza:

    Till the breaking of dawn
    when the sun kisses each tenderly
    bathing them in a heavenly
    glow. Transforming, morphing
    showering blessings.

    -- Amazing! Great job! Definitely worth a nomination!

  • 5 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    Jad at 2011-11-30

    Goodness your poetry has improved so much and your words are so carefully placed and filled with a deep emotional meaning and love that only you and this friend of yours can grasp. The poem itself had a good steady flow, though I think some more punctuation would help it. The emotions behind your words however are very beautiful and deep. I'm sure that whoever this is for will greatly appreciate this.

    "Till the breaking of dawn
    when the sun kisses each tenderly
    bathing them in a heavenly
    glow. Transforming, morphing
    showering blessings."
    ^^^
    This had to be my favorite stanza out of your entire poem. The words were each vivid with imagery that came to life as I read each line. I was taken away with the scenery you created. You know how to captivate the reader and draw them deeper and deeper into your words, which is a very good poetic device.

    All in all, i am glad to see that your poetry has been improving and that you are putting as much effort as always into your work. However you wrote this for is very fortunate to have you as a friend. Oh, and I also like some of the metaphors you put into the poem as it created a good solid image with a good meaning. Great job and keep writing!

    "posted from a my poem misplaced in someones else's account"

  • 5 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    Tara Kay at 2011-11-30

    Connie,

    From my window a tree
    looms high above the roof,
    reaching majestically to
    the sky.

    ^Awesome imagery, I'd just suggest adding a comma after from my window, to help the flow a little.

    It's leaves: ordinary yellow
    patterned with the brown edges
    of dying fall as winter
    marches forth.
    Ordinary:

    ^Ordinary, anything but girl, you really know how to make me smile don't you, and cry at the same time

    Till the breaking of dawn
    when the sun kisses each tenderly
    bathing them in a heavenly
    glow. Transforming, morphing
    showering blessings.

    ^Beautiful, All are blessed to have you as a friend girl xx

    My thoughts, my emotions
    are as this tree. You transform
    my life , shining on me with 
    happiness and joy. Of grace
    and trust.

    The warmth of friendship
    rains down on me. Quenching
    my thirst, drowning loneliness.
    Sprouting the spring of tenderness
    and rebirth of complacence.

    ^Such awesome stanza's, powerful, simple, with emotion and love, you are great girl, love you

    awesome flow, awesomness indeed

    Love
    Tara

    " Copied from my poem that was misplaced in someone else's account"

  • 5 years ago

    by tainted melody

    The descriptivness of this poem was great...I could really visualize the scene...good job!