Connie, I see you have attempted the poem already, much appreciated =)
The world is my home.
For a hundred million years
we have made an impact
on the worlds environment.
We are legion
The particular stanza talks about the history of ants the most.
Ants evolved from wasp-like ancestors in the mid-Cretaceous period between 110 and 130 million years ago and diversified after the rise of flowering plants. More than 12,500 out of an estimated total of 22,000 species have been classified. They are easily identified by their elbowed antennae and a distinctive node-like structure that forms a slender waist.
Ants have colonised almost every landmass on Earth. The only places lacking indigenous ants are Antarctica and a few remote or inhospitable islands. Ants thrive in most ecosystems, and may form 15-25% of the terrestrial animal biomass.
So mentioning "legion" is justified.
So yes your stanza is pretty precise.
Sight and sound play no
part in my society:
pheromones and chemical
host my communication.
We are ambiguous
^ The first line is so correct.
An ant's head contains many sensory organs. Like most insects, ants have compound eyes made from numerous tiny lenses attached together. Ants' eyes are good for acute movement detection but do not give a high resolution. They also have three small ocelli (simple eyes) on the top of the head that detect light levels and polarization, thus they have a mediocre vision.
Ants communicate with each other using pheromones. Like other insects, ants perceive smells with their long, thin and mobile antennae. The paired antennae provide information about the direction and intensity of scents. No wonder you have mentioned the word ambiguous.
We swarm from our nest
sightless and many, forging
the land for food, Our technique
is shock and awe
We are warriors
^ The particular stanza does not need an elaborate explanation but, I should pitch in a little.
Their nests can be found in the ground, under stones or logs, inside logs, hollow stems or even acorns. The materials used for construction include soil and plant matter, usually leaves. Some species of ants do build permanent nest, while an exceptional amount of species do not build a permanent nest, they simply abandon the nest.
As for food, ants are known to travel 200 metres (700 ft) from their nest. Most ants are generalist predators, scavengers and indirect herbivores, but a few have evolved specialised ways of obtaining nutrition. Leafcutter ants feed exclusively on a fungus that grows only within their colonies. They continually collect leaves which are taken to the colony, cut into tiny pieces and placed in fungal gardens.
Ants are capable of adopting to environments, which can be termed as mimesis. Ant are probably the only group where interactive teaching is observed.
Armored tough, masterful
fighters with machete jaws,
Ready for war in preservation
of our colony,
We are omnipresence
^ Ants have an exoskeleton, an external covering that provides a protective casing around the body and a point of attachment for muscles, unlike the internal skeletal system of humans and many other vertebrates
The ants head has two strong jaws, the mandibles, used to carry food, manipulate objects, construct nests, and for defense.
Machete - A large heavy knife with a broad blade, used as a weapon and an implement for cutting vegetation, which means sharp blades/jaws.
For protecting their colony, ants attack and defend themselves by biting and, in many species, by stinging, often injecting or spraying chemicals like formic acid. Bullet ants are know to have the most painful sting. Certain species are known to carry venom in sacs, but lets not go towards other species.
Ant colonies can be long-lived. The queens can live for up to 30 years, and workers live from 1 to 3 years. Males, however, are more transitory, and survive only a few weeks. Ant queens are estimated to live 100 times longer than solitary insects of a similar size, active all year long in the tropics but, in cooler regions, survive the winter in a state of dormancy or inactivity, which justifies the term "omnipresence", although I think omnipresent fits better.
And the note is informative.
Alright. It is obvious that you have done the homework needed to attempt the challenge, which I genuinely appreciate.
The structure is fine, and the content precise, you have formed a short piece which says in depth about the ants, you have covered all aspects from communication to morphology.
The only criticism that I have to offer is, I did not anticipate you describing the ants from their prescriptive. I thought you'd refer to them in a 3rd person/individual/entity sort of reference, but no, that does not take away from the poem, you are allowed to write the poem in any manner that you prefer.
But is the poem good?...More than what I expected.
How much of it is precise? ...All of it is precise.
Am I satisfied?. . .Highly.
Am I impressed?. . .Fudge yeah :P
Your composition has been deemed worthy. And you have emerged victorious. I am aware that the topic was out of your comfort zone. But you have excelled.
Connie this is really good and you met the challenge and as far as I am concerned won it. It does take the reader into the world of an ant and as I said could be applied to people and society today. Good job.
5 years ago
Connie, lol at me :p
I never thought this could turn out to be for an ANT.
my, you really have a vivid imagination!! And I'm impressed by the breaks you made, like letting someone complete nonstop, then there would be a sudden stop..
example: We are Legion...
I really love the personification.
Maybe for a second read, one can feel that it's describing some sort of a laborious, ant colony. :)
Btw, ants are my favorite insects. the stories 'bout them are so many..... they just show us how a human is totally weak beside of them!!
I think that the title fits really well and I have to admit that I bow to you for being able to write such a poem. I think that writing nature poems is quite tough, at least to me it is, but then even writing it from the perspective of an ant. Dear Connie your imagination is vivid and I believe that you're good at watching things, which is shown in this poem. I am not an ant expert, but what I can tell from my own experiences is that this definately describes ants and their life very well.
Your word choice fits to the context and I think that this poem flowed good to, overall absolutely great job. :P
I never thought I would enjoy a poem about ants but this is exceptional. Not only is it informative but it gives a look into their world.The single sentence at the end of each stanza is a great emphasis of each one. Good format, good write, vivid imagination
Wow! I don't think I've ever thought Id see the day where I found a poem about ants to be so intriguing! THis was awesome! Your title was great!! And I love the tone in this poem. Reminded me of line of soldiers, or in the case a line of ants chanting some kind of pledge lol.
I loved this surprisingly because I hate bugs! great job!
5 years ago
I think you did really good in your challenge, the title is a very creative way to refer yourself to ants good job :)
When I read the note the only thought that came to me was I could never have written so beautifully .... I think you wrote an amazing piece from the point of view of an ant. Very interesting read :)
5 years ago
by Tara Kay
How have I missed this Connie! My Apologies.
Ants? It's a very unique topic to write about and very well done, for I must fathom the genius quality of this :)
They are such amazing and talented insects, and you really captured this, each stanza was flowing and descriptive, just the way I like to read things,
and once again, you really did justice to the topic given to you.
I loved the opening and couldn't wholly guess the poem topic until the end, but that was part of what I really love about this piece, it just can be talking about so much in one stanza but add it all together and it could only be about ants.
LOL, I am laughing now because I am picturing and ant and singing a phonics song we sing at my work, that goes A' A' ants on my arm, A' A' ants of my arm, causing me alarm LOL
Back to the poem and I enjoyed this very much, what quality!