Arctic romance tempts
as innocence slowly melts
in winters cocoon
I love the title Blissy, and this poem was an amazing haiku, for you to have tacked it out in literally three seconds. lol
"Arctic romance tempts"
Like a cold love, something that's totally physical, emotionless
"as innocence slowly melts"
my favorite part :) I love the idea of something melting in the winter, when most things are expected to freeze. and how usually snow and wintertime are visuals for purity and cleanliness. But paired with that physical image above, it's an amazing contrast.
"in winters cocoon"
aannd this. this just ties it all together, they're wrapped up in the passion of this cold, purely psysical "love".
I love this, and I wish you were online more!! :)
5 years ago
by The Prince
Not keen on the title but great word choice! No critique here, just nicely chosen lexis. Delicate phrasing too. Maybe the title should fit the tone. I enjoyed this sweet and simple write, lovely :)
Not so keen on the title either but we both know you're more of the romantic at heart than I am so it works well with the emotions you encompass within the poem.
This is quite beautiful and it's a pleasure to read something new from you. I love Haiku/Senyru poetry and the atmosphere you created within the poem was both delicate and warm even though it referenced the cold. You did well with the contrasts of cold and warm it created the idea of summer and winter and then of course alone and together, apart then in love.
For such a short poem the imagery within this was great, I adored the reference to the cocoon and while this is a love poem I also found that it was deeper in the idea's of love, it was almost a piece of sexual tension from my perspective.
5 years ago
That was really melodious, I can instantly be tempted by such haikus. It's different and well.. so oriignal. great piece.